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2/19/2014 c1 pINk aNd GreeN CandyStripE
Heehee i want you. Goddamn!
10/5/2013 c1 Taint.Revile.Elude
This short story was not very clear in its intentions, characterization, description, dialog, or general idea. The title and summary are misleading: there is no lesbian, the bisexual boy just wants this lead female for no reason, and the guy she's supposed to be interested is not even mentioned let alone represented.

If you want to turn this short into a longer story, which you could, you're looking at a very rough idea at best. This isn't fully formed and, like I said, it's unclear where this could go in a bad way. I liked the idea behind the summary but that idea wasn't put forth and I wouldn't read a continuation of this short story.

However, I would read the story if it actually followed the summary. :D Hope this helps you.
10/2/2013 c1 Dreaminglight
You asked if you should turn this into a story and I definitely say Yes! Please make this into a story! I'm getting this weird vibe that this story will be one heck of a comedy one!

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