for Colors1/23 c1 jademist
Your story was a joy to read, and I really admired your writing style. The way you’ve brought your characters to life is truly impressive. I have some ideas related to your story that I think you might like, and I’d be happy to adapt them in my own style if you’d consider commissioning me. My Discord ID is jademist84—feel free to DM me anytime!
Your story was a joy to read, and I really admired your writing style. The way you’ve brought your characters to life is truly impressive. I have some ideas related to your story that I think you might like, and I’d be happy to adapt them in my own style if you’d consider commissioning me. My Discord ID is jademist84—feel free to DM me anytime!
1/22 c1 anaasophia16
I wanted to take a moment to tell you how much I enjoyed reading the first chapter of your story. The vivid imagery you’ve used to describe the environment in Koleroy truly draws the reader into a gritty, realistic world. The way you contrast the city’s upper and lower tiers—blissful cleanliness versus the harsh reality of the slums—is both striking and insightful. Your protagonist’s inner monologue gives us a deep understanding of their resilience and determination, especially with their decision to leave home and carve out their own path. I find your world-building, especially with the rough setting of the “Hippie Cave” and the protagonist’s struggles, to be raw and captivating.
As a professional comic artist, I believe your story would translate into an amazing graphic novel. The world you’ve crafted, with its layers of intrigue and social divide, could come to life in a truly mind-blowing way through the art. I would love to collaborate with you to adapt your story into a comic. From character designs to pacing, I’m excited to discuss how we could bring this compelling narrative to life in a visually dynamic format. If you’re open to the idea, I’d be thrilled to work together on this project!
Looking forward to hearing from you!
Best regards,
I wanted to take a moment to tell you how much I enjoyed reading the first chapter of your story. The vivid imagery you’ve used to describe the environment in Koleroy truly draws the reader into a gritty, realistic world. The way you contrast the city’s upper and lower tiers—blissful cleanliness versus the harsh reality of the slums—is both striking and insightful. Your protagonist’s inner monologue gives us a deep understanding of their resilience and determination, especially with their decision to leave home and carve out their own path. I find your world-building, especially with the rough setting of the “Hippie Cave” and the protagonist’s struggles, to be raw and captivating.
As a professional comic artist, I believe your story would translate into an amazing graphic novel. The world you’ve crafted, with its layers of intrigue and social divide, could come to life in a truly mind-blowing way through the art. I would love to collaborate with you to adapt your story into a comic. From character designs to pacing, I’m excited to discuss how we could bring this compelling narrative to life in a visually dynamic format. If you’re open to the idea, I’d be thrilled to work together on this project!
Looking forward to hearing from you!
Best regards,
4/15/2021 c1 lucia1156
The story is powerful, I like how it was presented. Good job writer! If you have some great stories like this one, you can publish it on NovelStar, just submit your story to or
The story is powerful, I like how it was presented. Good job writer! If you have some great stories like this one, you can publish it on NovelStar, just submit your story to or
2/1/2019 c16 Skitlation
Ah! I love this chapter! Poor Dr. Ram, though...
Ah! I love this chapter! Poor Dr. Ram, though...
4/8/2018 c15 Skitlation
YES.
YES.
6/18/2017 c14 Green Feather
No, Aldin! She doesn't hate you!
Whew, this chapter was an emotional roller coaster. Sparkles riding in on a dog had me cracking up with laughter, and I was really happy when Lily became friends with Pierce (she has a friend!) and found a cause to champion. On the other hand, loosing Sparkles was heartbreaking and then, well, she actually broke a heart, Aldin's - which is similar to kicking a puppy. Seriously, the guy is like a sweet, loyal golden retriever puppy... who's now going to chew on Shade.
I'm really interested in finding out what's going to happen next. Is Shade going to figure out what Sparkles is to Lily? Is Lily going to be left with no powers? Ho! There certainly is a lot going on! Speaking of which, I hope things went well with your finals. ) Thanks for wonderfully long chapter.
No, Aldin! She doesn't hate you!
Whew, this chapter was an emotional roller coaster. Sparkles riding in on a dog had me cracking up with laughter, and I was really happy when Lily became friends with Pierce (she has a friend!) and found a cause to champion. On the other hand, loosing Sparkles was heartbreaking and then, well, she actually broke a heart, Aldin's - which is similar to kicking a puppy. Seriously, the guy is like a sweet, loyal golden retriever puppy... who's now going to chew on Shade.
I'm really interested in finding out what's going to happen next. Is Shade going to figure out what Sparkles is to Lily? Is Lily going to be left with no powers? Ho! There certainly is a lot going on! Speaking of which, I hope things went well with your finals. ) Thanks for wonderfully long chapter.
1/12/2017 c4 
4CGMayra
I will be answering the Guest(s) below me:
Guest: Yes! I am back! So happy to be so -
BestBudRose: Thank you! I changed that right away! I'll be re-editing this story overtime, so I'm glad you pointed it out though :) Also, thank you so much! :D that means the world to me that you're enjoying it and getting a smile out of it!
Green Feather: Lol! She needs some ice cream right now xD haha! Truly, there are a lot of issues happening to her, and more and more she's getting confused on her 'belief' but at the same time, she knows and recognizes what's wrong and right. She still has a lot of growing to do, but she's doing her best. That's all an author could ask for :) Yeah~ I have a soft spot for Guinevere x3 and of course! Sparkles is just adorable as ever! Thank you and please, continue to stay tuned!
Green Feather: Yeah! I think half the silence of the crowd was just from seeing a rabbit with a rainbow tail turn into a ball of light, go into Lily, and then blast out a light comet. I imagine the fire-lit wood only heightened her astonishment lol! Yes indeed! I need her back in school, so does Dr. Ram~ P.S Maybe, but Kiki's a sweetie, lol!
Rocker on: Hahaha! Very true! And thank you so much! w
Rocker on: It probably would join with you in some form or other, much like Sparkles, except, on her planet, there was no color. So the other alien creatures were dull colored, and very cruel. You may have your arm wrapped in one of them turning into a floating liquid that turned your arm a greyish silver and gave you the power to control ice or morph metal. Something like that :) Let your imagination fly! He really has no shame, haha! But most of the time, the audience knows anyway! But I bet you don't know who LSG is? (lady saint grace) I tried to make that one a surprise, haha! But thank you so much for your comment! :D Much appreciated!
Thank you for your reviews! I hope to see more of your comments in the future! 3
4CGMayraI will be answering the Guest(s) below me:
Guest: Yes! I am back! So happy to be so -
BestBudRose: Thank you! I changed that right away! I'll be re-editing this story overtime, so I'm glad you pointed it out though :) Also, thank you so much! :D that means the world to me that you're enjoying it and getting a smile out of it!
Green Feather: Lol! She needs some ice cream right now xD haha! Truly, there are a lot of issues happening to her, and more and more she's getting confused on her 'belief' but at the same time, she knows and recognizes what's wrong and right. She still has a lot of growing to do, but she's doing her best. That's all an author could ask for :) Yeah~ I have a soft spot for Guinevere x3 and of course! Sparkles is just adorable as ever! Thank you and please, continue to stay tuned!
Green Feather: Yeah! I think half the silence of the crowd was just from seeing a rabbit with a rainbow tail turn into a ball of light, go into Lily, and then blast out a light comet. I imagine the fire-lit wood only heightened her astonishment lol! Yes indeed! I need her back in school, so does Dr. Ram~ P.S Maybe, but Kiki's a sweetie, lol!
Rocker on: Hahaha! Very true! And thank you so much! w
Rocker on: It probably would join with you in some form or other, much like Sparkles, except, on her planet, there was no color. So the other alien creatures were dull colored, and very cruel. You may have your arm wrapped in one of them turning into a floating liquid that turned your arm a greyish silver and gave you the power to control ice or morph metal. Something like that :) Let your imagination fly! He really has no shame, haha! But most of the time, the audience knows anyway! But I bet you don't know who LSG is? (lady saint grace) I tried to make that one a surprise, haha! But thank you so much for your comment! :D Much appreciated!
Thank you for your reviews! I hope to see more of your comments in the future! 3
1/11/2017 c2 Rocker on
Man, I wan't to have the genetic potential of the alien's race. She/he implied that each of it's species had different powers, so if I was bitten by a radioactive one, I would probably get my own super cool powers! Maybe not.
So, with a bit of dramatic irony, we all know that the kid who's locker is next to her's is Jet. How can we NOT know it?! He was blowing his cover SOOOOOO bad. If I were a super hero, I would be ashamed of his secret identity skills.
Man, I wan't to have the genetic potential of the alien's race. She/he implied that each of it's species had different powers, so if I was bitten by a radioactive one, I would probably get my own super cool powers! Maybe not.
So, with a bit of dramatic irony, we all know that the kid who's locker is next to her's is Jet. How can we NOT know it?! He was blowing his cover SOOOOOO bad. If I were a super hero, I would be ashamed of his secret identity skills.
1/11/2017 c1 Rocker on
Okay, this is cool. Man, if I bet if it followed her to school, half the girls there would want one to. Particularly the rich kids.
Okay, this is cool. Man, if I bet if it followed her to school, half the girls there would want one to. Particularly the rich kids.
1/11/2017 c13 1Rosezelene Ersa
The Dr.'s perspective is so fun to read!
I hope you'll be able to write it the way you want too- you're doing great so far. I love Sparkles' and Lilly's relationship, they're so cute. Looking forward to the climax!
-R.E
1Rosezelene ErsaThe Dr.'s perspective is so fun to read!
I hope you'll be able to write it the way you want too- you're doing great so far. I love Sparkles' and Lilly's relationship, they're so cute. Looking forward to the climax!
-R.E
1/10/2017 c12 4Joker the prince of all crime
Hi! I just wanted to pop in and say that I love this story! It's so good, and Iove how the characters have changed and developed! I do hope that you continue this story and that it reaches its amazing conclusion! Can't wait and-
-Until next time!
4Joker the prince of all crimeHi! I just wanted to pop in and say that I love this story! It's so good, and Iove how the characters have changed and developed! I do hope that you continue this story and that it reaches its amazing conclusion! Can't wait and-
-Until next time!
11/11/2016 c12 Green Feather
Oh yes, time to unleash Sparkles on the whole school now. The cuteness overload will be too much and the casualties many.
I'm glad Lily got a chance to calm down and re-evaluate things. Her decision to go back to the academy is opening up for some interesting interactions in the next chapters. And teachers with super powers? Haha, good times.
Looking forward to it.
P.S. Fangirls be loco.
Oh yes, time to unleash Sparkles on the whole school now. The cuteness overload will be too much and the casualties many.
I'm glad Lily got a chance to calm down and re-evaluate things. Her decision to go back to the academy is opening up for some interesting interactions in the next chapters. And teachers with super powers? Haha, good times.
Looking forward to it.
P.S. Fangirls be loco.
10/4/2016 c11 Green Feather
Well wow. There are rough days and then there's Lily's day, right here. Take all the ice-cream, girl, it's yours.
I liked the bit where we got to see Doctor Ram's wandering nebula-like mind, and Shade and Colours building such vastly different bridges together in the sky.
What the doctor said about Supers having no rights - and Lady Saint Grace's inaction, and Shade turning up to troll the day at school and finding out her true identity? It's like her whole world is turning grey, too.
At least there's still colour in loyal bunny-like forms and small acts of neighbourly kindness.
Well wow. There are rough days and then there's Lily's day, right here. Take all the ice-cream, girl, it's yours.
I liked the bit where we got to see Doctor Ram's wandering nebula-like mind, and Shade and Colours building such vastly different bridges together in the sky.
What the doctor said about Supers having no rights - and Lady Saint Grace's inaction, and Shade turning up to troll the day at school and finding out her true identity? It's like her whole world is turning grey, too.
At least there's still colour in loyal bunny-like forms and small acts of neighbourly kindness.
9/26/2016 c11 BestBudRose
Really love your story! Keep up the great work; I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! Also, it would be "neither are thee", not "neither is thee". That's be like saying neither is you. Other than that bit of nitpicking, I have nothing wrong with this chapter!
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Really love your story! Keep up the great work; I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! Also, it would be "neither are thee", not "neither is thee". That's be like saying neither is you. Other than that bit of nitpicking, I have nothing wrong with this chapter!
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