for Tentacles2/18/2018 c8 cavillager
I admit I was a quite aghast at the treatment Jay received at the tentacles of the Pkrt and the damage done to him by the alien fetus, but I was even more impressed, positively, with the openness of mind, acceptance and optimism Jay exhibited over the changes made to him in spite of his frightening experience and his loss of ability to speak. Yes this is fiction, but this attitude is one we can all learn from.
Thanks again for your imagination, creativity, and willingness to share it with the rest of us.
I noticed that you wrote this story about 5 years ago, and haven't updated your profile for almost that long. I do hope that you do get to see my comments as you deserve all the positive feedback you get and so much more.
David
I admit I was a quite aghast at the treatment Jay received at the tentacles of the Pkrt and the damage done to him by the alien fetus, but I was even more impressed, positively, with the openness of mind, acceptance and optimism Jay exhibited over the changes made to him in spite of his frightening experience and his loss of ability to speak. Yes this is fiction, but this attitude is one we can all learn from.
Thanks again for your imagination, creativity, and willingness to share it with the rest of us.
I noticed that you wrote this story about 5 years ago, and haven't updated your profile for almost that long. I do hope that you do get to see my comments as you deserve all the positive feedback you get and so much more.
David
2/18/2018 c2 Guest
No time to say 'hello'. Good-bye. Good-bye. Good-bye.
... on to the next chapter. :))
No time to say 'hello'. Good-bye. Good-bye. Good-bye.
... on to the next chapter. :))
2/18/2018 c1 David
I found this first chapter absolutely enthralling! I fell easily into Jay's body and mind, and felt every action by the alien, both the pain and the pleasure, and every reaction from panic to the drugged-induced calm and high.
It is very well written and so absolutely original in my experience. What a great imagination you have! Thanks so much for sharing it with us! I am on to the next chapter...
I found this first chapter absolutely enthralling! I fell easily into Jay's body and mind, and felt every action by the alien, both the pain and the pleasure, and every reaction from panic to the drugged-induced calm and high.
It is very well written and so absolutely original in my experience. What a great imagination you have! Thanks so much for sharing it with us! I am on to the next chapter...
12/27/2016 c12 Guest
Very well written and structured. Besides the erotica, it was a moving piece on being accepted as is and accepting one's self as is and also after a traumatic experience being at peace with one's changes and living life to its fullest potential
Very well written and structured. Besides the erotica, it was a moving piece on being accepted as is and accepting one's self as is and also after a traumatic experience being at peace with one's changes and living life to its fullest potential
11/4/2015 c11 Guest
Hmmmm. Bittersweet. I feel like Jay deserves better than to be so used and abused. I guess that's the life of a slave. I just sort of feel sad.
But the writing and imagination is splendid!
Hmmmm. Bittersweet. I feel like Jay deserves better than to be so used and abused. I guess that's the life of a slave. I just sort of feel sad.
But the writing and imagination is splendid!
11/29/2014 c12 DeathlyIceMaiden
I'm quit surprise jay or jade is content being a sex slave. But I guess its whatever floats your boat huh? :)
I'm quit surprise jay or jade is content being a sex slave. But I guess its whatever floats your boat huh? :)
8/23/2014 c12 StubbornDodecahedron
Wow, that was an adventure from start to finish. At first I wasn't sure what I had gotten myself into, but out of sheer curiosity I continued. For me personally it wasn't my flavor of erotica, but as a story I found it to be both interesting and well written.
Wow, that was an adventure from start to finish. At first I wasn't sure what I had gotten myself into, but out of sheer curiosity I continued. For me personally it wasn't my flavor of erotica, but as a story I found it to be both interesting and well written.
7/22/2014 c12 
1freak-joy-spastic
Definitely a page turner with more ups and downs than a roller coaster. This story has dragged me trough too many emotions to name and opened my view of prostitution as well as having a positive outlook on life. I'm rather certain I couldn't cope with even half of what this character has to deal with. Then again this is fiction, but still raises some good considerations. Definitely keep writing.
1freak-joy-spasticDefinitely a page turner with more ups and downs than a roller coaster. This story has dragged me trough too many emotions to name and opened my view of prostitution as well as having a positive outlook on life. I'm rather certain I couldn't cope with even half of what this character has to deal with. Then again this is fiction, but still raises some good considerations. Definitely keep writing.
12/18/2013 c12 4Reeciez
Omiga! This is incredibly interesting. Now I'm gonna go back and read the other two.
4ReeciezOmiga! This is incredibly interesting. Now I'm gonna go back and read the other two.
11/26/2013 c12 Waga
My friend gave me a 'tentacle-challenge' because I absolutely can't read anything 'squiddish' but then I read this and I must say, I am positively surprised by all these different aliens xD Keep writing, I would like to know what happens to Jay!
My friend gave me a 'tentacle-challenge' because I absolutely can't read anything 'squiddish' but then I read this and I must say, I am positively surprised by all these different aliens xD Keep writing, I would like to know what happens to Jay!
11/23/2013 c12 5ramblingrobin
This story is amazing! I loved it! Very creative and entertaining. Everything felt very genuine, even when it was bizarre. Definitely going in my favorites, it should be published.
5ramblingrobinThis story is amazing! I loved it! Very creative and entertaining. Everything felt very genuine, even when it was bizarre. Definitely going in my favorites, it should be published.
11/21/2013 c12 Cj Quinn
Hmmm. I think this story feels a bit... Thin and disjointed. If you were to fleash it out a bit more and perhaps have more than one reacuring character in Jay's life that would suit the story better. Maybe if Krtkt made another appearence? Possibly if Jay were to meet his children (Maybe just Krtkt's)?
Anyway I am just suggesting. It's up to you. You don't have to change anything! ] I understand. But I like to have reviews like this so I figured other might as well.
I wish you the best of luck in your endeavors!
Hmmm. I think this story feels a bit... Thin and disjointed. If you were to fleash it out a bit more and perhaps have more than one reacuring character in Jay's life that would suit the story better. Maybe if Krtkt made another appearence? Possibly if Jay were to meet his children (Maybe just Krtkt's)?
Anyway I am just suggesting. It's up to you. You don't have to change anything! ] I understand. But I like to have reviews like this so I figured other might as well.
I wish you the best of luck in your endeavors!