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11/21/2013 c1 123mobman
I like the imagery in the latter 2/3 of the poem- but to be honest, the first few lines confuse me. It was a hard switch, from flowers to cancer. I think the mix of imagery would flow a little better if maybe you made the whole piece a little longer. Not to mention I'd like to see more of your work, so it is probably for selfish reasons! The imagery is very powerful, which is difficult with an emotion. All in all, good job!
11/21/2013 c1 2MellaTheKnightmare
...Now I feel like scum. O.o
Wow, that "cancer of the soul" part really says something.
Great job!

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