for The Chain Link Project7/9/2014 c25 
14ReawakenedNightmare
Maybe I'm just morbid (which is entirely possible) but it seems kind of like the girl is remembering a conversation with this boy character of yours - who makes me think of a boyfriend - before he leaves her. That's probably not it though.
I really like the emotions in this. You're always adept in including emotions in your stories which is pretty awesome. :)
14ReawakenedNightmareMaybe I'm just morbid (which is entirely possible) but it seems kind of like the girl is remembering a conversation with this boy character of yours - who makes me think of a boyfriend - before he leaves her. That's probably not it though.
I really like the emotions in this. You're always adept in including emotions in your stories which is pretty awesome. :)
6/29/2014 c21 5Trishilish
Awe, I don't know if the image this conjured for me is what was intended, but I kept seeing a little ghost who maybe died without anyone's knowledge. Maybe they were hidden from the world and died that way, doomed to fade away slowly. Again, I don't know if that's what you intended to write, but I enjoyed what I got from it.
5TrishilishAwe, I don't know if the image this conjured for me is what was intended, but I kept seeing a little ghost who maybe died without anyone's knowledge. Maybe they were hidden from the world and died that way, doomed to fade away slowly. Again, I don't know if that's what you intended to write, but I enjoyed what I got from it.
6/29/2014 c20 Trishilish
I like the narrator here, she's so frustrated - it comes across nicely. I love the paragraph where you describe what she's writing - gives her some character in a short amount of words. It's sad that her twin is gone (dead I presume), and that she feels she has to grieve alone. I know she's talking about their impossible blue eyes, is she thinking her parents aren't her parents? Blue eyes are recessive, two brown eyed people could easily give birth to kids with blue eyes as long as somewhere in their gene pool that recessive trait is there. (And congrats, 20 is a milestone for sure :) I kind of started in the middle, but I’ve enjoyed what I’ve read so far – I say keep going until you start feeling obligated to go on, when it stops being fun.)
I like the narrator here, she's so frustrated - it comes across nicely. I love the paragraph where you describe what she's writing - gives her some character in a short amount of words. It's sad that her twin is gone (dead I presume), and that she feels she has to grieve alone. I know she's talking about their impossible blue eyes, is she thinking her parents aren't her parents? Blue eyes are recessive, two brown eyed people could easily give birth to kids with blue eyes as long as somewhere in their gene pool that recessive trait is there. (And congrats, 20 is a milestone for sure :) I kind of started in the middle, but I’ve enjoyed what I’ve read so far – I say keep going until you start feeling obligated to go on, when it stops being fun.)
6/29/2014 c19 Trishilish
This distracted me in the beginning "These aren't words [she] (not 'she'd) actually ever said to..." it interrupted the flow a bit. Other than that, what a sad tale - the tragedy of it all is driven home when the mother is comparing life as it is to what it could have been.
This distracted me in the beginning "These aren't words [she] (not 'she'd) actually ever said to..." it interrupted the flow a bit. Other than that, what a sad tale - the tragedy of it all is driven home when the mother is comparing life as it is to what it could have been.
6/29/2014 c18 Trishilish
The concept of this is escaping me. I can't put my finger on what is happening. Your language is nice, but I'm just not grasping the idea, my apologies. I don't get the disturbed vibe either. Why is the narrator so dependent on this person? They say they don't want to be /together/ together, and they say also that nothing matters (not jobs or kids) unless they are with them. It's just a weird relationship going on here.
The concept of this is escaping me. I can't put my finger on what is happening. Your language is nice, but I'm just not grasping the idea, my apologies. I don't get the disturbed vibe either. Why is the narrator so dependent on this person? They say they don't want to be /together/ together, and they say also that nothing matters (not jobs or kids) unless they are with them. It's just a weird relationship going on here.
6/29/2014 c17 Trishilish
That was sweet. And there is an overflow of break up elegies, it's refreshing to I see a snippet of a relationship on the mend.
That was sweet. And there is an overflow of break up elegies, it's refreshing to I see a snippet of a relationship on the mend.
6/29/2014 c16 Trishilish
I like the list of quotes, effective as a back story almost, it at least gives some context - I read them as a person growing up, with each quote they're a little older. I'm guessing the narrator - I don't know, I'm trying to decide if he's going to break up with, or kill the person he loves so much. I'm leaning more toward break up with, but when he mentions the irreversibility, my mind immediately goes morbid, haha.
My other theory would be that the narrator is contemplating suicide, which makes me sad when he's talking about how he doesn't have a choice, there's always a choice. Anyway, whatever the case, good prose.
I like the list of quotes, effective as a back story almost, it at least gives some context - I read them as a person growing up, with each quote they're a little older. I'm guessing the narrator - I don't know, I'm trying to decide if he's going to break up with, or kill the person he loves so much. I'm leaning more toward break up with, but when he mentions the irreversibility, my mind immediately goes morbid, haha.
My other theory would be that the narrator is contemplating suicide, which makes me sad when he's talking about how he doesn't have a choice, there's always a choice. Anyway, whatever the case, good prose.
6/29/2014 c15 Trishilish
I feel like I know exactly what you're talking about. When you're in a conversation, and you can't think of what to say right then and there - then when it's too late you find the words, but, it's too late. Which is okay in silly situations, but when the conversation is serious, or sad, you really wish you could go back. I like the 'would you be able to wait for me?' line because it's something I think everyone can relate to. Nice.
I feel like I know exactly what you're talking about. When you're in a conversation, and you can't think of what to say right then and there - then when it's too late you find the words, but, it's too late. Which is okay in silly situations, but when the conversation is serious, or sad, you really wish you could go back. I like the 'would you be able to wait for me?' line because it's something I think everyone can relate to. Nice.
6/28/2014 c16 14ReawakenedNightmare
I'm not sure why I like this one as I usually don't go for this type of thing, but I do. It's a very accurate story, so maybe that's why. Whatever it is, keep doing it. :)
14ReawakenedNightmareI'm not sure why I like this one as I usually don't go for this type of thing, but I do. It's a very accurate story, so maybe that's why. Whatever it is, keep doing it. :)
6/5/2014 c22 ReawakenedNightmare
Awww. This was cute and adorable and a bunch of other synonyms I can't think of off the top of my it up.
Awww. This was cute and adorable and a bunch of other synonyms I can't think of off the top of my it up.
5/22/2014 c20 ReawakenedNightmare
(I can't really answer your question because I'm guilty of skipping to certain chapters and then going back.)
This one was awesome for me to read because I actually do this, and even if the 'she' mentioned is fictional, it's nice to know that I'm not alone in that. Good job. :)
(I can't really answer your question because I'm guilty of skipping to certain chapters and then going back.)
This one was awesome for me to read because I actually do this, and even if the 'she' mentioned is fictional, it's nice to know that I'm not alone in that. Good job. :)
3/10/2014 c21 ReawakenedNightmare
I really, really like this one for some strange reason. There's so much symbolism here, and I feel like I would never catch it all. I feel like its main focus is suicide because the narrator is talking about endings - which could signify death - and ink spilling from them - which could symbolize blood. Anyway, I'll shut up now. xD
I really, really like this one for some strange reason. There's so much symbolism here, and I feel like I would never catch it all. I feel like its main focus is suicide because the narrator is talking about endings - which could signify death - and ink spilling from them - which could symbolize blood. Anyway, I'll shut up now. xD
3/5/2014 c18 ReawakenedNightmare
While I have to admit this is kinda creepy, I do like it. It's such an unrequited love that the narrator is willing to ignore reality. While common, it is an interesting concept.
While I have to admit this is kinda creepy, I do like it. It's such an unrequited love that the narrator is willing to ignore reality. While common, it is an interesting concept.
2/12/2014 c10 ReawakenedNightmare
There's no such thing as too out-there... the more original and weird the better. Not to mention it gives a little more introspective different point of view. :)
There's no such thing as too out-there... the more original and weird the better. Not to mention it gives a little more introspective different point of view. :)
1/26/2014 c13 6TheGirlAtMidnight
This one's my favorite so far, but all of them are very creative. Nice work.
6TheGirlAtMidnightThis one's my favorite so far, but all of them are very creative. Nice work.