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70BradytheJust
Okay, frankly I don't give a rats tailbone about Myka's anger. I understand his hesitance to tell Freyl... but NOTHING gives him the excuse to hurt Eyrk. She loves him and he loves her, and love means never hurting the people you care for.
I'm very mad right now, very very mad!
Then you give me an almost kiss, and then it goes to just two fingers! AHHH, I can't do this, you are torturing me!
Great chapter, but I'm ticked!
70BradytheJustOkay, frankly I don't give a rats tailbone about Myka's anger. I understand his hesitance to tell Freyl... but NOTHING gives him the excuse to hurt Eyrk. She loves him and he loves her, and love means never hurting the people you care for.
I'm very mad right now, very very mad!
Then you give me an almost kiss, and then it goes to just two fingers! AHHH, I can't do this, you are torturing me!
Great chapter, but I'm ticked!
6/22/2017 c18 BradytheJust
Oh goodness, I hate this so much!
I've said it before, I am Brook... especially when you say "Emphasising that they knew something he did not." Gosh, I hate those secrets! Especially when you love each member of whatever shape they happen to be in.
Argh, this is so confusing and weird and Ahhh! I can't take anymore!
Great job my friend!
Oh goodness, I hate this so much!
I've said it before, I am Brook... especially when you say "Emphasising that they knew something he did not." Gosh, I hate those secrets! Especially when you love each member of whatever shape they happen to be in.
Argh, this is so confusing and weird and Ahhh! I can't take anymore!
Great job my friend!
6/21/2017 c17 BradytheJust
No! No more sides to this dang web! I can't take anymore!
I'll admit when Freyl and Eryk kissed I thought something was up, but betrothed! Ahhhh! And the almost kiss "Twin pools of honeyed sunshine, twin petals..." you described it so well! I'm using some of those techniques!
Great job with this chapter.. even if all this romance web stuff is driving me crazy!
No! No more sides to this dang web! I can't take anymore!
I'll admit when Freyl and Eryk kissed I thought something was up, but betrothed! Ahhhh! And the almost kiss "Twin pools of honeyed sunshine, twin petals..." you described it so well! I'm using some of those techniques!
Great job with this chapter.. even if all this romance web stuff is driving me crazy!
6/21/2017 c16 BradytheJust
Aww... Solace indeed and a lot of hugs! :)
This chapter is now my favorite, the bending being used to alter what someone can see reminds me of a Jedi mind trick! (and good on Eryk's part for asking Brook to disguise the wound, if I saw someone I loved with that wound I'd be pretty ticked)
So this love web is getting crazier, and I'm enjoying every bit of it! Now everyone gets hugs!
Aww... Solace indeed and a lot of hugs! :)
This chapter is now my favorite, the bending being used to alter what someone can see reminds me of a Jedi mind trick! (and good on Eryk's part for asking Brook to disguise the wound, if I saw someone I loved with that wound I'd be pretty ticked)
So this love web is getting crazier, and I'm enjoying every bit of it! Now everyone gets hugs!
6/16/2017 c15 BradytheJust
Wow, this chapter had more twists and turns than the battle of Endor in Star Wars!
So Eryksa kissed her brother... that's kinda... unexpected. Brook now has been crushed by that revelation, although I'm still Brook in this scenario 9I actually have shook myself like a dog to ward off thoughts of a pretty girl)
Ah, that thought when you think a relationship is a sibling like and you can make a move, then you walk in on a kiss... gosh have I been there!
Anyway, this whole love web is driving me crazy, and I've got to keep reading!
Also, I love how Brook's bender powers provided an instant translation... wish I'd had that in Spanish!
Wow, this chapter had more twists and turns than the battle of Endor in Star Wars!
So Eryksa kissed her brother... that's kinda... unexpected. Brook now has been crushed by that revelation, although I'm still Brook in this scenario 9I actually have shook myself like a dog to ward off thoughts of a pretty girl)
Ah, that thought when you think a relationship is a sibling like and you can make a move, then you walk in on a kiss... gosh have I been there!
Anyway, this whole love web is driving me crazy, and I've got to keep reading!
Also, I love how Brook's bender powers provided an instant translation... wish I'd had that in Spanish!
6/14/2017 c14 BradytheJust
Okay... I'm Brook!
I've had a lot of encounters with the fairer species in life, and sometimes I stare and simply want to cuddle them senseless and "Firmly overcome every protest and resistance." I also like crushing resistance and making them my friends and cuddle buddies! :D
I also tend to give myself a slap in the face whenever those images come to mind... the pain does stop the madness!
So I am Brook because this is how I act around girls on a regular bases
Okay... I'm Brook!
I've had a lot of encounters with the fairer species in life, and sometimes I stare and simply want to cuddle them senseless and "Firmly overcome every protest and resistance." I also like crushing resistance and making them my friends and cuddle buddies! :D
I also tend to give myself a slap in the face whenever those images come to mind... the pain does stop the madness!
So I am Brook because this is how I act around girls on a regular bases
5/26/2017 c13 BradytheJust
Well, this is a love triangle or square or a blooming pentagon! I've lost count, so I think I'll just call it the love web... that's good right?
Anyway, I think the last scene was my favorite, because although I've read and written quite about army camps, I really felt the ambiance and fear of being caught, the same fear that Brook/Eyrk felt. I also liked Brook's italicized thoughts about Eyrk... so sweet!
Great chapter and now I can't wait for the meeting with the commander!
Well, this is a love triangle or square or a blooming pentagon! I've lost count, so I think I'll just call it the love web... that's good right?
Anyway, I think the last scene was my favorite, because although I've read and written quite about army camps, I really felt the ambiance and fear of being caught, the same fear that Brook/Eyrk felt. I also liked Brook's italicized thoughts about Eyrk... so sweet!
Great chapter and now I can't wait for the meeting with the commander!
5/19/2017 c12 BradytheJust
I love the idea of a Muse completing you... "If the person you love completes you..." Perfection!
Well I happened to think of a mermaid at the time, but still, I do like the idea of having someone who makes your powers stronger... whether that person amplifies your powers or simply provides a moral compass, the relationship is perfect. :D
And Myka smiled... didn't think that was possible. Glad I was wrong, and I really feel like the relationship between these three travelers is growing stronger.
Also, I can agree with Eryk's quote that "Some soldiers are just well-armed bandits" but if you encounter a group under a competent commander with discipline they can be allies. Good thinking Brook! And things seem to be getting very awkward with Freyl's return...
I can't wait to read more!
I love the idea of a Muse completing you... "If the person you love completes you..." Perfection!
Well I happened to think of a mermaid at the time, but still, I do like the idea of having someone who makes your powers stronger... whether that person amplifies your powers or simply provides a moral compass, the relationship is perfect. :D
And Myka smiled... didn't think that was possible. Glad I was wrong, and I really feel like the relationship between these three travelers is growing stronger.
Also, I can agree with Eryk's quote that "Some soldiers are just well-armed bandits" but if you encounter a group under a competent commander with discipline they can be allies. Good thinking Brook! And things seem to be getting very awkward with Freyl's return...
I can't wait to read more!
5/15/2017 c11 BradytheJust
Oh boy, soldiers in the woods! :O
The chapter hooked me the second I read the "Like a flock of birds looting a grain field" because... oh boy that was wonderful! :) I really don't know how you do so much with words my friend, but it makes your stories much more perfect! :D
Well having Brook's knowledge of herbs makes the story interesting (In my Roleplaying games, I tend to do a lot of foraging... I want ALL the pretty flowers!) Also I like how Myka's arm hasn't healed yet and how the injury takes time to heal... just makes it more interesting.
And Freyl? Ooohh... I need a few minutes to digest that one.
Keep it up and I can't wait to read more! :D
Oh boy, soldiers in the woods! :O
The chapter hooked me the second I read the "Like a flock of birds looting a grain field" because... oh boy that was wonderful! :) I really don't know how you do so much with words my friend, but it makes your stories much more perfect! :D
Well having Brook's knowledge of herbs makes the story interesting (In my Roleplaying games, I tend to do a lot of foraging... I want ALL the pretty flowers!) Also I like how Myka's arm hasn't healed yet and how the injury takes time to heal... just makes it more interesting.
And Freyl? Ooohh... I need a few minutes to digest that one.
Keep it up and I can't wait to read more! :D
4/23/2017 c10 BradytheJust
Translations are always good, and I'm interested in seeing how you came up with that language!
Last chapter it was Eryk I felt connected too, and now it's Brook. Because sometimes no matter how much you tell me not too, I will hug you to make you feel better... then feel like a fool when I am reminded that the act of hugging hurts. *sighs*
I really want to know who Freyl is and I have a feeling, his/her identity will be a major factor in the story and with the character development!
Great chapter and I was able to visualize it in my minds eye. Great job! :)
Translations are always good, and I'm interested in seeing how you came up with that language!
Last chapter it was Eryk I felt connected too, and now it's Brook. Because sometimes no matter how much you tell me not too, I will hug you to make you feel better... then feel like a fool when I am reminded that the act of hugging hurts. *sighs*
I really want to know who Freyl is and I have a feeling, his/her identity will be a major factor in the story and with the character development!
Great chapter and I was able to visualize it in my minds eye. Great job! :)
4/16/2017 c9 BradytheJust
Well... I always thought having mouth to mouth resuscitation was a good way to make two characters 'kiss' but this is a new level of... odd.. still I might try it in my own works.
I kinda see myself as Eryk in this scenario, because as good hearted and as caring as I am, I do tend to panic a lot under pressure, and probably will spill some things.
This chapter was nice and I really can't wait to see the after effects of the 'medicine' and how it will affect Brook and Myka.
I must keep reading!
Well... I always thought having mouth to mouth resuscitation was a good way to make two characters 'kiss' but this is a new level of... odd.. still I might try it in my own works.
I kinda see myself as Eryk in this scenario, because as good hearted and as caring as I am, I do tend to panic a lot under pressure, and probably will spill some things.
This chapter was nice and I really can't wait to see the after effects of the 'medicine' and how it will affect Brook and Myka.
I must keep reading!
4/14/2017 c8 BradytheJust
"He doesn't believe that pretty words will make a nasty situation any better" Hmm... that's a good quote! Not much of an excuse for being arrogant, but still a good quote.
One suggestion: For the conversation that takes place in the past, maybe insert a page break? It's fine the way it is, but it helps me understand that the conversation takes place in the past or is a memory. I got lost a bit before I realized the talk with Eryk was in the past, so a bit of separation might help.
So Eryk is in pain, Myka has a fever, and Brook still has a broken arm... I don't know how they are getting through these situations as wounded as they are!
I'm addicted! Must keep reading!
"He doesn't believe that pretty words will make a nasty situation any better" Hmm... that's a good quote! Not much of an excuse for being arrogant, but still a good quote.
One suggestion: For the conversation that takes place in the past, maybe insert a page break? It's fine the way it is, but it helps me understand that the conversation takes place in the past or is a memory. I got lost a bit before I realized the talk with Eryk was in the past, so a bit of separation might help.
So Eryk is in pain, Myka has a fever, and Brook still has a broken arm... I don't know how they are getting through these situations as wounded as they are!
I'm addicted! Must keep reading!
4/14/2017 c7 BradytheJust
Wow...
This story has more twists and turns than the battle of Endor!
I really do like the cost of using talents. Rules for magic I'm not so hot about, but I do believe everything has a choice and a consequence... having Eyrk take on the pain of whatever he chooses to destroy is a good price to pay for causing harm.
However, I think Idiot deserved every ounce of pain he got... and more besides.
Wow...
This story has more twists and turns than the battle of Endor!
I really do like the cost of using talents. Rules for magic I'm not so hot about, but I do believe everything has a choice and a consequence... having Eyrk take on the pain of whatever he chooses to destroy is a good price to pay for causing harm.
However, I think Idiot deserved every ounce of pain he got... and more besides.
4/14/2017 c6 BradytheJust
Kill that son of a gun!
Gosh, I'm so angry right now! Seriously, putting those three to sleep was a mercy they did not deserve... they deserve to die! (This is the medieval fantasy period, right? They have made advancements in the method of torture! Use them!)
Besides, Eryk has proven he can be underestimated, and I know that size isn't everything in a fight. So guys, kick his arse! (pardon my language)
On a lighter note, I know a way to get my sister to be quiet, I'll just put my fist in her mouth!
Kill that son of a gun!
Gosh, I'm so angry right now! Seriously, putting those three to sleep was a mercy they did not deserve... they deserve to die! (This is the medieval fantasy period, right? They have made advancements in the method of torture! Use them!)
Besides, Eryk has proven he can be underestimated, and I know that size isn't everything in a fight. So guys, kick his arse! (pardon my language)
On a lighter note, I know a way to get my sister to be quiet, I'll just put my fist in her mouth!
4/14/2017 c5 BradytheJust
Well...
It wasn't too dark, but Idiot certainly lives up to his name... or nickname as the case may be. I love dumb villains and these three louts are no exception.
The chase scene with the sleeping powder was very well done, I could see everything in my mind's eye and its a good basis for if I want to write chase scenes. I've never been good at them (I prefer a brawl) but I'll be going to this chapter for help!
Ugh... next chapter, sounds like fun! :)
Well...
It wasn't too dark, but Idiot certainly lives up to his name... or nickname as the case may be. I love dumb villains and these three louts are no exception.
The chase scene with the sleeping powder was very well done, I could see everything in my mind's eye and its a good basis for if I want to write chase scenes. I've never been good at them (I prefer a brawl) but I'll be going to this chapter for help!
Ugh... next chapter, sounds like fun! :)