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28TriploblasticSkies
Ohhhhkkay. So, out of everything, this was the last thing I expected to happen. Eryk dressed up as a girl, hmm. Please don't tell me his brother and he had an incestuous relationship where Eryk was demanded to cross-dress and now for pleasing the older brother he's doing it again. But if it is that way... I don't really have any objection. Not that I'm anyone to object, but seriously, I won't mind that, Lol.
And of course, the italics... the beautiful words. The sneak peak you gave me sounds more beautiful with the rest of the words. And of course, the gladness I have at seeing Brooke and Eryk's relation developing. So, now I don't know what to write about... I guess, let's wait? Anyways, I'm sorry for being late. You know, the internet problem. Hope to get another update soon. Oh, and in the middle there's first person used somewhere. Thought I'd inform you.
28TriploblasticSkiesOhhhhkkay. So, out of everything, this was the last thing I expected to happen. Eryk dressed up as a girl, hmm. Please don't tell me his brother and he had an incestuous relationship where Eryk was demanded to cross-dress and now for pleasing the older brother he's doing it again. But if it is that way... I don't really have any objection. Not that I'm anyone to object, but seriously, I won't mind that, Lol.
And of course, the italics... the beautiful words. The sneak peak you gave me sounds more beautiful with the rest of the words. And of course, the gladness I have at seeing Brooke and Eryk's relation developing. So, now I don't know what to write about... I guess, let's wait? Anyways, I'm sorry for being late. You know, the internet problem. Hope to get another update soon. Oh, and in the middle there's first person used somewhere. Thought I'd inform you.
3/19/2014 c13 TriploblasticSkies
Well, I have come to love Brooke more and more in the past... eight chapters. So, like, I read them all out in a night. And now it doesn't seem that hard to comprehend. It's actually quite catchy.
Maybe nothing like Kavelyx and Rynda and Solfan... but yeah, the characters are likeable. Of course, Eryk is just lovable. I kinda like how every character sort of defies the stereotypes of their appearances.
What I don't really get is why Brook is so disturbed by Myka loving Eryk's brother. Is it because of the intimacy Eryk and Myka share? Or is it simply because it's a confusing love triangle for him?
I desperately hope Eryk and Brook to end up together, but by this point, I can do with any two together. They all will be interesting.
I especially love the italicized lines. They're deep.
Saying that, yeah, this story is sort of that diamond you need to look out for... and you only see it's shine after some wait. Maybe I should stuck around earlier only.
Well, hope to see the new chapter soon.
Well, I have come to love Brooke more and more in the past... eight chapters. So, like, I read them all out in a night. And now it doesn't seem that hard to comprehend. It's actually quite catchy.
Maybe nothing like Kavelyx and Rynda and Solfan... but yeah, the characters are likeable. Of course, Eryk is just lovable. I kinda like how every character sort of defies the stereotypes of their appearances.
What I don't really get is why Brook is so disturbed by Myka loving Eryk's brother. Is it because of the intimacy Eryk and Myka share? Or is it simply because it's a confusing love triangle for him?
I desperately hope Eryk and Brook to end up together, but by this point, I can do with any two together. They all will be interesting.
I especially love the italicized lines. They're deep.
Saying that, yeah, this story is sort of that diamond you need to look out for... and you only see it's shine after some wait. Maybe I should stuck around earlier only.
Well, hope to see the new chapter soon.
1/22/2014 c1 smiling smiley
Hi! I read this and then I read the first chapter from 'I don't break the rules."
I think the extra description really helped with the pace, and the voice of the character Brook.
I really like the dialogue- it's kind of an older English. It helps set the time period to a medieval or Elizabethan time.
As for the characters, my favorite is Brook. I like his compassion and curiosity, and I'm wondering what his powers are as a bender and why that is stigmatized.
I'm not really liking the taller guy. He's too bossy and ungrateful. And too possessive. And a little creepy. (He may have his reasons for being that way that will come up later). I kind of want to punch his face though.
He's an interesting character, though I'm not sure how you wanted him to come across.
Hi! I read this and then I read the first chapter from 'I don't break the rules."
I think the extra description really helped with the pace, and the voice of the character Brook.
I really like the dialogue- it's kind of an older English. It helps set the time period to a medieval or Elizabethan time.
As for the characters, my favorite is Brook. I like his compassion and curiosity, and I'm wondering what his powers are as a bender and why that is stigmatized.
I'm not really liking the taller guy. He's too bossy and ungrateful. And too possessive. And a little creepy. (He may have his reasons for being that way that will come up later). I kind of want to punch his face though.
He's an interesting character, though I'm not sure how you wanted him to come across.
1/12/2014 c1 5Whirlymerle
From the RG.
[one that didn’t belong to someone considerably different in age] I might be wrong, because all the negatives are confusing me a bit, but if he couldn’t remember seeing this, it means that means he sees this all the time, right? So when he sees the man and the youth, wouldn’t it be normal for him?
I really like the writing in this. It was clear, and easily pictured. I like how this is told from the pov of the watcher, because it allows the reader to wonder and piece together with him the nature of the relationship between the two travelers.
Stopping time seems like a ridiculously powerful gift. I’m definitely interested in seeing what you do with it. And Brook’s character. Nice start!
5WhirlymerleFrom the RG.
[one that didn’t belong to someone considerably different in age] I might be wrong, because all the negatives are confusing me a bit, but if he couldn’t remember seeing this, it means that means he sees this all the time, right? So when he sees the man and the youth, wouldn’t it be normal for him?
I really like the writing in this. It was clear, and easily pictured. I like how this is told from the pov of the watcher, because it allows the reader to wonder and piece together with him the nature of the relationship between the two travelers.
Stopping time seems like a ridiculously powerful gift. I’m definitely interested in seeing what you do with it. And Brook’s character. Nice start!
12/31/2013 c5 28TriploblasticSkies
Ooookay... whoosh. You know, I'm not used to get long chapters from you. The last chapters of AToS actually got me a bit used to a certain length, Lol.
I would have been happier had Eryk been in the position of Myka, but I like where it is. Love it, in fact.
The whole chapter was great, amazing, fantabulous! :D And yup, I'm still very envious of you...
28TriploblasticSkiesOoookay... whoosh. You know, I'm not used to get long chapters from you. The last chapters of AToS actually got me a bit used to a certain length, Lol.
I would have been happier had Eryk been in the position of Myka, but I like where it is. Love it, in fact.
The whole chapter was great, amazing, fantabulous! :D And yup, I'm still very envious of you...
12/25/2013 c4 TriploblasticSkies
Okay, you know I loved it. Especially with so much of Eryk in it. I mean, I like Myka too, but Eryk is -as I said before too -my kinda slash guy. Or did I say that for Myka? Geez, ol' forgetful me.
I'm not really sure why I felt this way, but yeah, some parts made me feel the emotions, but a few did not. Not that there were many parts, considering how looooong chapters you write, but still. It made me feel a bit... different, I guess. It's not like AToS or ITCYE where I felt totally sad or totally happy. This story is admittedly different, and I had already been knowing the fact even before starting it, but it's really very different. Not the plot or the potential triangle, but something I just can't put my finger on yet. Anyways, the chapter was good, and I really did like it, but for the first time, I found some errors -or whatever, I dunno, in your writing. Perhaps it wasn't edited or proofread, or FP again did something, but in the first paragraph there are some places where there are no caps and one or two places where they are for no reason. Or maybe there's a reason and I can't find that? Anyways, I thought that I should inform you about that and the missing commas in the dialogues.
Now let me come to the main point -I am SO UTTERLY envious of you! Goodness, I don't know where you get those words and those formations, (even the names, for that matter, Lol) but the sincerity and the sheer awesomeness as if you actually are from the time of Oscar Wilde makes ME so embarrassed! *I'm so proud of you, my poison wielder.*
You'll totally make me quit writing, gal. I feel like an eight-year-old whenever I read your work... *pouts*
BUT! Please know that I love you a lot and you are the reason why I'm still here. Or else I would have totally left this place. And I mean it.
(Geez, now you must be feeling so weird, no? Such a sap I am... T.T, Lol.)
Okay, you know I loved it. Especially with so much of Eryk in it. I mean, I like Myka too, but Eryk is -as I said before too -my kinda slash guy. Or did I say that for Myka? Geez, ol' forgetful me.
I'm not really sure why I felt this way, but yeah, some parts made me feel the emotions, but a few did not. Not that there were many parts, considering how looooong chapters you write, but still. It made me feel a bit... different, I guess. It's not like AToS or ITCYE where I felt totally sad or totally happy. This story is admittedly different, and I had already been knowing the fact even before starting it, but it's really very different. Not the plot or the potential triangle, but something I just can't put my finger on yet. Anyways, the chapter was good, and I really did like it, but for the first time, I found some errors -or whatever, I dunno, in your writing. Perhaps it wasn't edited or proofread, or FP again did something, but in the first paragraph there are some places where there are no caps and one or two places where they are for no reason. Or maybe there's a reason and I can't find that? Anyways, I thought that I should inform you about that and the missing commas in the dialogues.
Now let me come to the main point -I am SO UTTERLY envious of you! Goodness, I don't know where you get those words and those formations, (even the names, for that matter, Lol) but the sincerity and the sheer awesomeness as if you actually are from the time of Oscar Wilde makes ME so embarrassed! *I'm so proud of you, my poison wielder.*
You'll totally make me quit writing, gal. I feel like an eight-year-old whenever I read your work... *pouts*
BUT! Please know that I love you a lot and you are the reason why I'm still here. Or else I would have totally left this place. And I mean it.
(Geez, now you must be feeling so weird, no? Such a sap I am... T.T, Lol.)
12/15/2013 c3 TriploblasticSkies
Aww, I love them. Like, really love them. To be honest, I look forward more toward the scenes between Myka and Eryk. When it comes to Brook... I don't really feel much for him yet, although he does kind of give the enigmatic vibe... Well, let's see what happens next.
Update soon! :D
Aww, I love them. Like, really love them. To be honest, I look forward more toward the scenes between Myka and Eryk. When it comes to Brook... I don't really feel much for him yet, although he does kind of give the enigmatic vibe... Well, let's see what happens next.
Update soon! :D
12/14/2013 c2 TriploblasticSkies
Well, to begin with, I already have taken a liking to Eryk. He's, ya'know, 'my sort of slash guy'. The title of the story is interesting, by the way. And now, on with the gushing!
Oh My God! I just luuuuurve the story! Gawd, how COULD I miss it? Oh yeah, I remember -the exams? Who are the tormentors to establish this stupid trend? Fuck 'em.
Anyways, can I praise you even more? You just astonish me, trust me, gal. I mean, how could anyone get better even at THIS height of perfection? Marvelous, gurl, marvelous. O' Poison Wielder, thy nefarious mind snatchest my mind'st afar.
Update soon, girl. Oh, and let this week go and I might just get time in Christmas break to have some relaxation -if RL allows.
Well, to begin with, I already have taken a liking to Eryk. He's, ya'know, 'my sort of slash guy'. The title of the story is interesting, by the way. And now, on with the gushing!
Oh My God! I just luuuuurve the story! Gawd, how COULD I miss it? Oh yeah, I remember -the exams? Who are the tormentors to establish this stupid trend? Fuck 'em.
Anyways, can I praise you even more? You just astonish me, trust me, gal. I mean, how could anyone get better even at THIS height of perfection? Marvelous, gurl, marvelous. O' Poison Wielder, thy nefarious mind snatchest my mind'st afar.
Update soon, girl. Oh, and let this week go and I might just get time in Christmas break to have some relaxation -if RL allows.
12/2/2013 c1 4Jitterbug Blues
Hey :D!
I'm surprised by the POV - and here you were telling me that third person wasn't usually *your* thing. I think you write it well; the narrative flows well, and this was easy to read. It was fun too. I like the change since I think it's important to experiment. Also, this was just fun to read, albeit a *bit* confusing at points (I got it after the second re-read though). It might be that you should watch your epithets a bit, or just make it *clearer* who is engaged in a specific action. But then it might just be me - I'm a bit slower today _;;
I don't have a lot of intelligent things today since I'm still kind of sick, but the plot is engaging and interesting so far; I wonder if the smaller traveller is a woman...?
4Jitterbug BluesHey :D!
I'm surprised by the POV - and here you were telling me that third person wasn't usually *your* thing. I think you write it well; the narrative flows well, and this was easy to read. It was fun too. I like the change since I think it's important to experiment. Also, this was just fun to read, albeit a *bit* confusing at points (I got it after the second re-read though). It might be that you should watch your epithets a bit, or just make it *clearer* who is engaged in a specific action. But then it might just be me - I'm a bit slower today _;;
I don't have a lot of intelligent things today since I'm still kind of sick, but the plot is engaging and interesting so far; I wonder if the smaller traveller is a woman...?