for A New Revolution1/7/2014 c7 
1Krast Bannert
I loved Akeera's reaction. Also, just keep all the POVs the same font, to add on to what I said the PM.
1Krast BannertI loved Akeera's reaction. Also, just keep all the POVs the same font, to add on to what I said the PM.
1/5/2014 c7 2Terra Booma
NICE! I like this new character, everyone else we've seen so far has been hardened by war. (Or Burns, but he doesn't count.)
diedre seens familiar, at least the name, but I like what you did.
Quick question
Is Akeera the leader of american resistance?
2Terra BoomaNICE! I like this new character, everyone else we've seen so far has been hardened by war. (Or Burns, but he doesn't count.)
diedre seens familiar, at least the name, but I like what you did.
Quick question
Is Akeera the leader of american resistance?
12/30/2013 c6 3TriSX
Lesson learnt... revenge will only get you nothing but only more problems.
And... Allen is finding his way back to HQ...
Oh... how about the other charcters from the resistance? What happen to them lately?
Oh... keep up the good work!
3TriSXLesson learnt... revenge will only get you nothing but only more problems.
And... Allen is finding his way back to HQ...
Oh... how about the other charcters from the resistance? What happen to them lately?
Oh... keep up the good work!
12/27/2013 c5 Chris 'SG-17
Too lazy to log in with a phone...
Goodbye Pat... you just stepped on a pressure triggered mine...but if its a dud... I'm happy that no one has to die...
Anyway... keep up the good work!
Too lazy to log in with a phone...
Goodbye Pat... you just stepped on a pressure triggered mine...but if its a dud... I'm happy that no one has to die...
Anyway... keep up the good work!
12/28/2013 c5 30Black Trinity
Favorite Char. Akeera. Why, is that she reminds me of my very first character. The personality is real similar.
Story's fine the way it is.
Sometimes the chapters are short... but otherwise it's good.
No least favorite.
MOAR!
Please.
30Black TrinityFavorite Char. Akeera. Why, is that she reminds me of my very first character. The personality is real similar.
Story's fine the way it is.
Sometimes the chapters are short... but otherwise it's good.
No least favorite.
MOAR!
Please.
12/27/2013 c5 2Terra Booma
Q and A time! Woo!
1. I like Charlie (still dubbed) and Allen
2. It's fine as it is, maybe more of the other characters?
3. XD I think you do fine
4. Grove. Cause he's bad.
2Terra BoomaQ and A time! Woo!
1. I like Charlie (still dubbed) and Allen
2. It's fine as it is, maybe more of the other characters?
3. XD I think you do fine
4. Grove. Cause he's bad.
12/22/2013 c4 3TriSX
Okay... Joe, Let's get you back with sniping... if you survive...
Anyway... Keep up the good work!
3TriSXOkay... Joe, Let's get you back with sniping... if you survive...
Anyway... Keep up the good work!
12/22/2013 c1 6Silencerz123
It's dark, Picking up where we left off. One thing I really love is your character progression throughout the series especially Akeera (forgive me if I spelled it wrong) she starts out as this displaced girl who evolved into this bad ass soldier, who now are pretty much calling the shots. I love how she's more tactical and stronger. I cant wait to see how this one turns out, #Hooked.
6Silencerz123It's dark, Picking up where we left off. One thing I really love is your character progression throughout the series especially Akeera (forgive me if I spelled it wrong) she starts out as this displaced girl who evolved into this bad ass soldier, who now are pretty much calling the shots. I love how she's more tactical and stronger. I cant wait to see how this one turns out, #Hooked.
12/22/2013 c1 3Ravajava
My biggest critique is that I honestly feel as if nothing in this segment advanced any plot. The writing here was good, but I just don't feel as if anything happened...
3RavajavaMy biggest critique is that I honestly feel as if nothing in this segment advanced any plot. The writing here was good, but I just don't feel as if anything happened...
12/19/2013 c3 3TriSX
Okay... Grove is captured by Akeera...
Allen is lossing men...
Wren is having problems...
Whats Carter' s fate?
Good job with your story!
3TriSXOkay... Grove is captured by Akeera...
Allen is lossing men...
Wren is having problems...
Whats Carter' s fate?
Good job with your story!
12/18/2013 c3 30Black Trinity
That went dark kinda quick... And I'm getting into this more and more.
MOAR!
Please.
30Black TrinityThat went dark kinda quick... And I'm getting into this more and more.
MOAR!
Please.