for Kiss My Hand1/29/2006 c1 
31The Love Demi Goddess
I love the line "kiss my hand and twice be free" Pretty poetic and threatening to a degree.
I'm not sure I understand completly what this story/poem is about, but it reminds me a lot of the Phantom of the Opera!
Good job, I love your vivid language.
Some parts of it don't really flow, however, like:
"Kiss my hand and be twice free You’ll have your guarantee I’ll watch over you with care Just listen to me."
The last line seems to clash witht he rest.
Good job however, I like it.
Write hard,write long,write until dawn,TLDG
31The Love Demi GoddessI love the line "kiss my hand and twice be free" Pretty poetic and threatening to a degree.
I'm not sure I understand completly what this story/poem is about, but it reminds me a lot of the Phantom of the Opera!
Good job, I love your vivid language.
Some parts of it don't really flow, however, like:
"Kiss my hand and be twice free You’ll have your guarantee I’ll watch over you with care Just listen to me."
The last line seems to clash witht he rest.
Good job however, I like it.
Write hard,write long,write until dawn,TLDG
12/25/2004 c1 18Jack Ryan
Your attention to ryhme and rythm is by far some of the best I've seen on this site. I could make no suggestions for change. I thought this was really interesting, but I wonder if I got the right impression. It seems as if the narrator of the poem is seducing someone, only to destroy him afterwards. When it speeks of "free" does it mean death?
18Jack RyanYour attention to ryhme and rythm is by far some of the best I've seen on this site. I could make no suggestions for change. I thought this was really interesting, but I wonder if I got the right impression. It seems as if the narrator of the poem is seducing someone, only to destroy him afterwards. When it speeks of "free" does it mean death?
10/3/2003 c1 17Lady Cantara
*weeps loudly* I love that! It just reminds me of so much, hurt, that i have dealt with. U are amazing!
17Lady Cantara*weeps loudly* I love that! It just reminds me of so much, hurt, that i have dealt with. U are amazing!
6/16/2001 c1 3Scared Stash
reminds me of a medievil scene, with a maiden in a red velvet dress... dunno why... hehe :)
3Scared Stashreminds me of a medievil scene, with a maiden in a red velvet dress... dunno why... hehe :)