for Lucifer6/12/2014 c1 
277electrical moon
Great first line that pulls you into the poem and wonderful line breaks. I really love the image of him stealing the flowers and of static light sticking to the mother's pores and skin.
277electrical moonGreat first line that pulls you into the poem and wonderful line breaks. I really love the image of him stealing the flowers and of static light sticking to the mother's pores and skin.
2/28/2014 c1 20Ventracere
The structure of your poem is unique and different, with all the spaces you left in between. It gives the poem a break, a silent pause where nothing is spoken. You place them well so you can hit home the message you want. I also thought your use of anaphora was interesting - the repetitiveness also highlights the several different forms Lucifer/Satan can be, and how close the devil is. I also enjoyed your visuals, the imagery helped hone the pictures that came into mind.
20VentracereThe structure of your poem is unique and different, with all the spaces you left in between. It gives the poem a break, a silent pause where nothing is spoken. You place them well so you can hit home the message you want. I also thought your use of anaphora was interesting - the repetitiveness also highlights the several different forms Lucifer/Satan can be, and how close the devil is. I also enjoyed your visuals, the imagery helped hone the pictures that came into mind.
2/15/2014 c1 66forgottenwords7
Oh wow, this was fantastic and I especially loved the imagery, it was so captivating. Brilliant work! This kinda reminded me of the show Supernatural to be honest ;)
66forgottenwords7Oh wow, this was fantastic and I especially loved the imagery, it was so captivating. Brilliant work! This kinda reminded me of the show Supernatural to be honest ;)