for Dru12/10/2016 c18 Vorpalfox
I hope you haven't given up on this story, I recently started reading it and now that I've finished all chapters, I can't stop thinking about Nikolai.
I hope you haven't given up on this story, I recently started reading it and now that I've finished all chapters, I can't stop thinking about Nikolai.
12/2/2016 c18 Guest
Please don't forget about this
Please don't forget about this
11/9/2016 c15 Aj
This part had me so moved. Honestly, I thought I was losing interest, but you killed it.
Great story. Thank you so much for writing!
This part had me so moved. Honestly, I thought I was losing interest, but you killed it.
Great story. Thank you so much for writing!
11/8/2016 c1 Unit
Here's Unit, coming to give you your monthly reminder to pleeeeeeaaaaase update sooooooooon!
Here's Unit, coming to give you your monthly reminder to pleeeeeeaaaaase update sooooooooon!
10/19/2016 c18 Guest
You might want to take a look at wattpad. It's a community of writers/readers/editors. Stories are posted, read, reviewed and commented on. I think you might have better luck finding editors, idea workthrough and generally more responsive readers. Another reason to use it would be you can update and change anything with in what has already been posted. I know it sounds like I'm doing a commercial for them- I'm really not- I just think it might be helpful for you. I've enjoyed reading this story and I really want to continue reading it. I'd offer to help but I've no experience and I wouldn't be able to offer more than an hour or two a month. Long story short... check out wattpad- the app for smart phones or tablets or just the website otherwise. They do short story contests and Facebook/twitter conversations.
You might want to take a look at wattpad. It's a community of writers/readers/editors. Stories are posted, read, reviewed and commented on. I think you might have better luck finding editors, idea workthrough and generally more responsive readers. Another reason to use it would be you can update and change anything with in what has already been posted. I know it sounds like I'm doing a commercial for them- I'm really not- I just think it might be helpful for you. I've enjoyed reading this story and I really want to continue reading it. I'd offer to help but I've no experience and I wouldn't be able to offer more than an hour or two a month. Long story short... check out wattpad- the app for smart phones or tablets or just the website otherwise. They do short story contests and Facebook/twitter conversations.
9/23/2016 c18 Guest
For me, there is no correlation between age and maturity. Some people remain childish throughout their lives while others grow with their experiences. I don't think Katie's age is a factor. What's more important are her experiences and how she learns from them. The age difference between her and enforcer is also a moot point. What raises eyebrows in your 20s doesn't faze anyone in 30s and 40s. The perception of age changes with time. In my opinion what is more important is how characters grow and interact.
For me, there is no correlation between age and maturity. Some people remain childish throughout their lives while others grow with their experiences. I don't think Katie's age is a factor. What's more important are her experiences and how she learns from them. The age difference between her and enforcer is also a moot point. What raises eyebrows in your 20s doesn't faze anyone in 30s and 40s. The perception of age changes with time. In my opinion what is more important is how characters grow and interact.
9/16/2016 c1 A
Please update :(
Please update :(
8/7/2016 c1 Unit
I check this story once a day in hopes that you'll finally end your 4 month break. Hurry up! We like this story too much!
I check this story once a day in hopes that you'll finally end your 4 month break. Hurry up! We like this story too much!
7/25/2016 c18 Guest
Please don't abandon this amazing story, we are here!
Please don't abandon this amazing story, we are here!
7/9/2016 c18 anonymous
Hey there hope that tweaking this story to your liking is working out! Really can't wait for the next update :)
Hey there hope that tweaking this story to your liking is working out! Really can't wait for the next update :)
6/5/2016 c18 Blaith Nightshayde
I think this story is fantastic just the way it is. Don't you worry about a thing, I cant wait for the next update!
I think this story is fantastic just the way it is. Don't you worry about a thing, I cant wait for the next update!
5/30/2016 c18 
2BorderlinePD
First off, let me tell you how much I like your story. I just sat down and read it in one sitting. It's really good and I love the way it is written.
Next, I'm going to answer the questions that you asked.
I really like the character development that we see with both Katie and Nikolai. In the beginning, Katie wouldn't see past her view of "Werewolves are dangerous. Humans need protected." Even when it was obvious that the council was at least bias. Now, though, we see her opening up to new ideas and caring for about the werewolves in a way she hadn't before. It subtle and I like it. Nikolai's development is even more subtle than Katie's. The way he acts is completely understandable when you think about how naive and young Katie is supposed to be. He's slowly becoming less closed off and is (maybe) coming to trust her more, which is something we didn't see in the beginning.
The sex scene, in my opinion, was done extremely well. It didn't come off so much as non-consensual as awkward for the parties. It didn't seem forced, it seemed as it should have. Two people who didn't really know each other making the best of a situation as they should have. I like it kept the relationship as a political marriage with potential rather than insta-love. It seemed realistic to me.
I don't think the age gap is actually a problem. I mean, I see why other people might, but for me it's part of the story. She's young and naive. He's older and seen things that she probably couldn't handle. Plus it's a political marriage. The age difference could have been much worse if you look at it from that point. If you feel as if she's too young, I don't think it'd hurt to make her a few years older, but I don't think it's the most needed thing.
I actually prefer first person more often than not. In my opinion, it helps me connect more to the characters. In this story, I ended up having the opposite view as Katie in the beginning, so the first person helped me understand more about where she was coming from even though I didn't agree.
I think you have a good amount of detail actually. I usually skim over long descriptions in stories (and regret it when it comes up again and I have to backtrack) but I didn't find myself doing that very often, or at all, with this one.
I hope you update soon. If you have anymore questions that you want to know about from a reader, don't hesitate to ask. I love your story and I'd love to help in any way I possibly can. :)
2BorderlinePDFirst off, let me tell you how much I like your story. I just sat down and read it in one sitting. It's really good and I love the way it is written.
Next, I'm going to answer the questions that you asked.
I really like the character development that we see with both Katie and Nikolai. In the beginning, Katie wouldn't see past her view of "Werewolves are dangerous. Humans need protected." Even when it was obvious that the council was at least bias. Now, though, we see her opening up to new ideas and caring for about the werewolves in a way she hadn't before. It subtle and I like it. Nikolai's development is even more subtle than Katie's. The way he acts is completely understandable when you think about how naive and young Katie is supposed to be. He's slowly becoming less closed off and is (maybe) coming to trust her more, which is something we didn't see in the beginning.
The sex scene, in my opinion, was done extremely well. It didn't come off so much as non-consensual as awkward for the parties. It didn't seem forced, it seemed as it should have. Two people who didn't really know each other making the best of a situation as they should have. I like it kept the relationship as a political marriage with potential rather than insta-love. It seemed realistic to me.
I don't think the age gap is actually a problem. I mean, I see why other people might, but for me it's part of the story. She's young and naive. He's older and seen things that she probably couldn't handle. Plus it's a political marriage. The age difference could have been much worse if you look at it from that point. If you feel as if she's too young, I don't think it'd hurt to make her a few years older, but I don't think it's the most needed thing.
I actually prefer first person more often than not. In my opinion, it helps me connect more to the characters. In this story, I ended up having the opposite view as Katie in the beginning, so the first person helped me understand more about where she was coming from even though I didn't agree.
I think you have a good amount of detail actually. I usually skim over long descriptions in stories (and regret it when it comes up again and I have to backtrack) but I didn't find myself doing that very often, or at all, with this one.
I hope you update soon. If you have anymore questions that you want to know about from a reader, don't hesitate to ask. I love your story and I'd love to help in any way I possibly can. :)
5/24/2016 c1 Unit
UPDATE PLEASE! This story is too good to go a month without an update!
UPDATE PLEASE! This story is too good to go a month without an update!
5/13/2016 c18 A
I think the 10 year ago should be maintained. Maybe Katie as a 20 year old is more appealing , to me. Just because I keep thinking of 18 year olds as high schoolers and just young. But then again maybe it's her age that makes her more eager to learn and just open minded about everything . I guess it's fine.
Nikolai does seem abrasive. Then again we know nothing about him. Except perhaps that he was an orphan. Just getting him to speak emotional matters is like tamimg a wild beast to act human. Which is literally what's happening.
The sex scenes definitely was consensual. You handled it well.
I think the 10 year ago should be maintained. Maybe Katie as a 20 year old is more appealing , to me. Just because I keep thinking of 18 year olds as high schoolers and just young. But then again maybe it's her age that makes her more eager to learn and just open minded about everything . I guess it's fine.
Nikolai does seem abrasive. Then again we know nothing about him. Except perhaps that he was an orphan. Just getting him to speak emotional matters is like tamimg a wild beast to act human. Which is literally what's happening.
The sex scenes definitely was consensual. You handled it well.