for Ink Stains and Regrets8/6/2015 c1 
8rchll
Wow, first off, this is powerful stuff. I had a :O face by the end. By the end of this poem I was felt I could feel the poolside tile under my feet, as if I was there watching the scene pay out before me.
Some of my favourite words/phrases - "velvet shadows", "furnace", "still dripping in my hair", "i'm sorry mother, i think i died that day", & "the wetness of life".
There are a few extra "little words" that I think can be taken out to provide for better fluidity. For example, "that" and "but".
8rchllWow, first off, this is powerful stuff. I had a :O face by the end. By the end of this poem I was felt I could feel the poolside tile under my feet, as if I was there watching the scene pay out before me.
Some of my favourite words/phrases - "velvet shadows", "furnace", "still dripping in my hair", "i'm sorry mother, i think i died that day", & "the wetness of life".
There are a few extra "little words" that I think can be taken out to provide for better fluidity. For example, "that" and "but".
4/8/2015 c4 14Strawberrywaters
I am so sorry this has happened to you. I truly wish you well. I too can relate to much of what you have written here and if you want to talk, I am here. Beautiful poetry nevertheless.
14StrawberrywatersI am so sorry this has happened to you. I truly wish you well. I too can relate to much of what you have written here and if you want to talk, I am here. Beautiful poetry nevertheless.
1/25/2015 c20 Amberflame805
Wow k
Lol this was great but I'm never taking anything after reading this xD
Wow k
Lol this was great but I'm never taking anything after reading this xD
8/11/2014 c1 1Iris Nightningale
I like your plot and I hope you will continue writing till it's end.
BEST OF LUCK!
1Iris NightningaleI like your plot and I hope you will continue writing till it's end.
BEST OF LUCK!
7/16/2014 c14 21Scribe of Dreams
This sums up my nights lately, I just haven't been able to put them into words. I like how you said it much better than anything I would've come up with anyway.
21Scribe of DreamsThis sums up my nights lately, I just haven't been able to put them into words. I like how you said it much better than anything I would've come up with anyway.
7/14/2014 c10 rust phoenix
So much power in such a short poem. Sorry, I have a migraine and probably am not very articulate right now, but this is really good. Your descriptions of light and colour and smoke really emphasize the emotion.
So much power in such a short poem. Sorry, I have a migraine and probably am not very articulate right now, but this is really good. Your descriptions of light and colour and smoke really emphasize the emotion.