for Chasing Pavements4/23/2021 c1 PatGo
Great start! I'd like to see how this is going to turn out. You know what, you can join NovelStar's writing competition.
Great start! I'd like to see how this is going to turn out. You know what, you can join NovelStar's writing competition.
4/28/2017 c1 Guest
Omg! Great start. More please!
Omg! Great start. More please!
10/28/2014 c1 sierrak1331
I think you should expand on this and turn it into a real story, it seems like it could go somewhere.
I think you should expand on this and turn it into a real story, it seems like it could go somewhere.
9/16/2014 c1 toffeema
cute. :)
cute. :)
7/11/2014 c1 rinaslily
Awww! This was so cute! I love how Chase was so kind and got along so well with Lucy. This fuels my fantasies of ever running into some hot celebrity (pun intended) and then getting asked out. I really want a sequel!
Awww! This was so cute! I love how Chase was so kind and got along so well with Lucy. This fuels my fantasies of ever running into some hot celebrity (pun intended) and then getting asked out. I really want a sequel!
6/30/2014 c1 
73AlysonSerenaStone
Wonderful one shot! I love the idea of an normal girl with a famous person! I loved this story and I thought it was really cute. I did see a couple of grammar issues, but nothing major. Great work!
73AlysonSerenaStoneWonderful one shot! I love the idea of an normal girl with a famous person! I loved this story and I thought it was really cute. I did see a couple of grammar issues, but nothing major. Great work!
6/24/2014 c1 1my princess ending
That was cute. Like really really cute. I love how Chase was so gentle towards her and how Lucy handled the situation and all. They click so well and I'm dying to read more about them because they seem like a couple that is worth reading about.
1my princess endingThat was cute. Like really really cute. I love how Chase was so gentle towards her and how Lucy handled the situation and all. They click so well and I'm dying to read more about them because they seem like a couple that is worth reading about.
6/23/2014 c1 Julietish
Hello, it’s Juliet from ADoR! Thanks for participating in Star-Cross’d this round. The title definitely caught my attention, so good choice! This was a cute story. Who wouldn’t want to happen upon a celebrity? Their connection happened instantly, and that was great to witness. That being said, there are a few lines that could be fixed a bit: “memories of the collide and the concussion” could stand to lose the ‘the’ in front of concussion. For “Wait you filled my prescription” should end in a question mark and have a comma after ‘wait.’ I certainly hope you find yourself inspired by future SC prompts!
Hello, it’s Juliet from ADoR! Thanks for participating in Star-Cross’d this round. The title definitely caught my attention, so good choice! This was a cute story. Who wouldn’t want to happen upon a celebrity? Their connection happened instantly, and that was great to witness. That being said, there are a few lines that could be fixed a bit: “memories of the collide and the concussion” could stand to lose the ‘the’ in front of concussion. For “Wait you filled my prescription” should end in a question mark and have a comma after ‘wait.’ I certainly hope you find yourself inspired by future SC prompts!
6/12/2014 c1 39Harmony'sLoveHP
I liked your story. I did, however, find several mistakes in capitalization and commas and such. A few of your sentences were fragments that could have been linked together with a comma and a transition word. I like your take on the picture though. It was a sweet, romantic story. Nice work.
39Harmony'sLoveHPI liked your story. I did, however, find several mistakes in capitalization and commas and such. A few of your sentences were fragments that could have been linked together with a comma and a transition word. I like your take on the picture though. It was a sweet, romantic story. Nice work.
6/9/2014 c1 24DreamWriter10
Pretty cute story, good job! One tip would be to not use abbreviations (such as ave) in your writing. Other than that I liked it. :)
24DreamWriter10Pretty cute story, good job! One tip would be to not use abbreviations (such as ave) in your writing. Other than that I liked it. :)
6/2/2014 c1 Thehairyleg
This was a well written story. But there were parts that I had to laugh at, like all the "THE Chase Harrisons" and how the main characters fall for each other so quickly. Why do they even like each other, that wasn't very clear, because they're both so beautiful? Haha! I was also shocked to see that she let him into her apartment without knowing him and taking a pill he gave her. I know he's famous, but
still. The ending felt a little incomplete too.
I loved how you incorporated the song chasing pavements into the story. It was done in a playful joking manner that felt real. The interactions between her and THE Chase Harrison were cute and showed how comfortable they were with each other. Good job!
This was a well written story. But there were parts that I had to laugh at, like all the "THE Chase Harrisons" and how the main characters fall for each other so quickly. Why do they even like each other, that wasn't very clear, because they're both so beautiful? Haha! I was also shocked to see that she let him into her apartment without knowing him and taking a pill he gave her. I know he's famous, but
still. The ending felt a little incomplete too.
I loved how you incorporated the song chasing pavements into the story. It was done in a playful joking manner that felt real. The interactions between her and THE Chase Harrison were cute and showed how comfortable they were with each other. Good job!