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6/6/2014 c1 12plainjane19
This story is absolutely amazing. I honestly have no criticism for you and I'm really excited to see where you take this story. Also i really like your character development. I love how you allow the reader to discover who the characters and make their own judgments based on the characters' actions and thoughts. Amazing work, please continue!
5/23/2014 c1 1enhanks
I really wish I had some constructive criticism for you about this piece, but I'm at a complete loss. This was beautifully heartbreaking. I felt her pain and loss. It was especially chilling, because I remember being pregnant and giving birth in the hospital to my 7mo like it was yesterday and being so afraid all the time that something I did might hurt her somehow.

That being said... I have no idea where this story is headed, but I look forward to finding out. Thank you for sharing :)
5/20/2014 c1 Rain Child
Heartbreaking... The last lines are very true: It's unfair,very unfair,but she at least get to held her daughter for a moment. It's was brief,but still...

I like the way you narrate. You should think of publishing something because you got some real talent here. Keep the good work!
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