
6/6/2014 c1
12plainjane19
This story is absolutely amazing. I honestly have no criticism for you and I'm really excited to see where you take this story. Also i really like your character development. I love how you allow the reader to discover who the characters and make their own judgments based on the characters' actions and thoughts. Amazing work, please continue!

This story is absolutely amazing. I honestly have no criticism for you and I'm really excited to see where you take this story. Also i really like your character development. I love how you allow the reader to discover who the characters and make their own judgments based on the characters' actions and thoughts. Amazing work, please continue!
5/23/2014 c1
1enhanks
I really wish I had some constructive criticism for you about this piece, but I'm at a complete loss. This was beautifully heartbreaking. I felt her pain and loss. It was especially chilling, because I remember being pregnant and giving birth in the hospital to my 7mo like it was yesterday and being so afraid all the time that something I did might hurt her somehow.
That being said... I have no idea where this story is headed, but I look forward to finding out. Thank you for sharing :)

I really wish I had some constructive criticism for you about this piece, but I'm at a complete loss. This was beautifully heartbreaking. I felt her pain and loss. It was especially chilling, because I remember being pregnant and giving birth in the hospital to my 7mo like it was yesterday and being so afraid all the time that something I did might hurt her somehow.
That being said... I have no idea where this story is headed, but I look forward to finding out. Thank you for sharing :)
5/20/2014 c1 Rain Child
Heartbreaking... The last lines are very true: It's unfair,very unfair,but she at least get to held her daughter for a moment. It's was brief,but still...
I like the way you narrate. You should think of publishing something because you got some real talent here. Keep the good work!
Heartbreaking... The last lines are very true: It's unfair,very unfair,but she at least get to held her daughter for a moment. It's was brief,but still...
I like the way you narrate. You should think of publishing something because you got some real talent here. Keep the good work!