for Why Embers Burn So Bright5/26/2014 c1 je ne veux pas travailler
I had high hopes for this. In its essence, it had a lot of potential, but for me, the story quickly deteriorated after Louis described the guy's lips/lashes. I found it weird her male best friend slash future love interest would describe another man like that, non-ironically. I felt like there was no chemistry between Louis and Amber and often, Amber came off as an exaggerated cliche. Also, the relationship with Luke/realization of love for Louis was very rushed. Again, I think this story has some potential...it just needs a literary makeover.
I had high hopes for this. In its essence, it had a lot of potential, but for me, the story quickly deteriorated after Louis described the guy's lips/lashes. I found it weird her male best friend slash future love interest would describe another man like that, non-ironically. I felt like there was no chemistry between Louis and Amber and often, Amber came off as an exaggerated cliche. Also, the relationship with Luke/realization of love for Louis was very rushed. Again, I think this story has some potential...it just needs a literary makeover.
5/24/2014 c1 
4Kitxkat
This is really an endearing and sweet story. I really find it funny how Louis just likes to set up blind dates for his friend, Amber! It must be quite hard to deal with his silly antics, right? Louis reminds me of my friends too, and Amber is just kind of like me! Even if there's a lot things to do, (studying, working, stress, etc.) You should always pause and realize that - you should also have some fun in your life. Even if it means, letting your guy friend drag you on blind dates! x)
But in the end, this is really a cute story! I didn't spot any dramatic errors in this piece, and I think it's written well enough! Although, if you added some more description, and elaborated some more, that would have made this piece even better! But I understand if you purposely didn't write it with a lot of imagery, after all, it's a short slice of fiction, right? Anyways, it was a nice, heartwarming read! Keep up the nice work fellow writer!
4KitxkatThis is really an endearing and sweet story. I really find it funny how Louis just likes to set up blind dates for his friend, Amber! It must be quite hard to deal with his silly antics, right? Louis reminds me of my friends too, and Amber is just kind of like me! Even if there's a lot things to do, (studying, working, stress, etc.) You should always pause and realize that - you should also have some fun in your life. Even if it means, letting your guy friend drag you on blind dates! x)
But in the end, this is really a cute story! I didn't spot any dramatic errors in this piece, and I think it's written well enough! Although, if you added some more description, and elaborated some more, that would have made this piece even better! But I understand if you purposely didn't write it with a lot of imagery, after all, it's a short slice of fiction, right? Anyways, it was a nice, heartwarming read! Keep up the nice work fellow writer!