for never let go10/24/2014 c1 Krisanita
Twas nice,i knw dats a lame comment,but i cnt rily describe wat i feel abt it,twas nice..dem guyz playing sacrificial lamb..lol
Twas nice,i knw dats a lame comment,but i cnt rily describe wat i feel abt it,twas nice..dem guyz playing sacrificial lamb..lol
8/1/2014 c1 
9Incandescently Chelsea
This was so bittersweet. I absolutely adored it.
There was tragedy, mystery, humor, and romance. The best ingredients to a perfect creation. And I even liked the main character. I wasn't sure if I would find her so pain-stricken that she came off as boring, but by the end, I knew that wasn't the case. I really did like her.
Great plot, superb writing technique, brilliant portrayal.
Loved it!
Chelsea Elizabeth
9Incandescently ChelseaThis was so bittersweet. I absolutely adored it.
There was tragedy, mystery, humor, and romance. The best ingredients to a perfect creation. And I even liked the main character. I wasn't sure if I would find her so pain-stricken that she came off as boring, but by the end, I knew that wasn't the case. I really did like her.
Great plot, superb writing technique, brilliant portrayal.
Loved it!
Chelsea Elizabeth
7/22/2014 c1 2Milea Kirst
Wow...that was intense! Not many stories can make me cry, but this one totally did.
I love how you incorporated the running theme several times throughout the story, but it's still subtle enough that you don't feel like you're being smashed over the head with it. Probably my favorite reference was when she went for a run, and she felt her brother's presence and imagined him running too. I also really liked your description of her sitting at her grave, and how being at a cemetery gave her the freedom to feel whatever she needed.
I really liked this story. The flow was interesting too- lots of mini-cliffhangers with the way you inserted flashbacks after intense scenes. There's also a lot of slow realizations that you don't spell out immediately- realizing that Tommy died in the beginning, getting a gut feeling that her parents were involved with the breakup but not being sure until later, etc... While Ryan/Kelley subplot felt a little random since I don't think the MC mentioned having a boyfriend before that, it did establish that time has past since her and Aidan and that she is now single, which I believe was your point. Anyway, it was a good read, and I think you should write more of these! :D
2Milea KirstWow...that was intense! Not many stories can make me cry, but this one totally did.
I love how you incorporated the running theme several times throughout the story, but it's still subtle enough that you don't feel like you're being smashed over the head with it. Probably my favorite reference was when she went for a run, and she felt her brother's presence and imagined him running too. I also really liked your description of her sitting at her grave, and how being at a cemetery gave her the freedom to feel whatever she needed.
I really liked this story. The flow was interesting too- lots of mini-cliffhangers with the way you inserted flashbacks after intense scenes. There's also a lot of slow realizations that you don't spell out immediately- realizing that Tommy died in the beginning, getting a gut feeling that her parents were involved with the breakup but not being sure until later, etc... While Ryan/Kelley subplot felt a little random since I don't think the MC mentioned having a boyfriend before that, it did establish that time has past since her and Aidan and that she is now single, which I believe was your point. Anyway, it was a good read, and I think you should write more of these! :D
6/30/2014 c1 rae
Amazing.
:)
Amazing.
:)
6/28/2014 c1 74AlysonSerenaStone
Simply beautiful and stunning, is what I think! This is such an emotional read and it is very clear why this is the winner. Very good writing and a very real plot line. I love how the theme of running goes clear through the story and I also like the use of present tense. I enjoyed the flashbacks-using one as an opener was just great! Really good one shot and a great read!
74AlysonSerenaStoneSimply beautiful and stunning, is what I think! This is such an emotional read and it is very clear why this is the winner. Very good writing and a very real plot line. I love how the theme of running goes clear through the story and I also like the use of present tense. I enjoyed the flashbacks-using one as an opener was just great! Really good one shot and a great read!
6/25/2014 c1 Andrea
Wow, this was a powerful story. Very well written. I really enjoyed it!
Wow, this was a powerful story. Very well written. I really enjoyed it!
6/23/2014 c1 Julietish
Hello, it’s Juliet from ADoR! Thanks for participating in Star-Cross’d this round. As it turns out, your one-shot is the winner of the Runner prompt! Congratulations! This one-she was magnificently written—as I read it, I found myself noticing the quality of every sentence. The flashbacks worked so well in telling the story of the narrator, keeping me on the edge of my seat. There are a couple of typos I found. In the line that says, “His parents don’t leave here anymore,” I believe that ‘leave’ should be ‘live’. Also, in the line that says, “My dad looks at me. ‘Where you?’”, ‘where’ should be ‘were’. Congratulations once again, and I certainly hope you find yourself inspired by future SC prompts!
Hello, it’s Juliet from ADoR! Thanks for participating in Star-Cross’d this round. As it turns out, your one-shot is the winner of the Runner prompt! Congratulations! This one-she was magnificently written—as I read it, I found myself noticing the quality of every sentence. The flashbacks worked so well in telling the story of the narrator, keeping me on the edge of my seat. There are a couple of typos I found. In the line that says, “His parents don’t leave here anymore,” I believe that ‘leave’ should be ‘live’. Also, in the line that says, “My dad looks at me. ‘Where you?’”, ‘where’ should be ‘were’. Congratulations once again, and I certainly hope you find yourself inspired by future SC prompts!
6/1/2014 c1 8spark n' Jetz
I can't lose him, too. "Aidan, please don't walk away from me." And he doesn't. He runs.
-Oh man...
8spark n' JetzI can't lose him, too. "Aidan, please don't walk away from me." And he doesn't. He runs.
-Oh man...
5/30/2014 c1 darklove78
Wow! This was really sad but hopeful too! I was really nervous about the ending but you didn't disappoint!
Wow! This was really sad but hopeful too! I was really nervous about the ending but you didn't disappoint!
5/29/2014 c1 6Carmel March
What did I think? I think it was spectacular. I can't believe how many different emotions and how much character development you fit into this oneshot. It was sad and sweet at the same time, which worked so well and made the story really powerful and effective.
The last paragraph was a standout to me, and I loved the incorporation of the flashbacks. Great pacing, and fantastic writing.
Thanks for sharing this! :) ZJA.
6Carmel MarchWhat did I think? I think it was spectacular. I can't believe how many different emotions and how much character development you fit into this oneshot. It was sad and sweet at the same time, which worked so well and made the story really powerful and effective.
The last paragraph was a standout to me, and I loved the incorporation of the flashbacks. Great pacing, and fantastic writing.
Thanks for sharing this! :) ZJA.