for Oracle6/15/2014 c2 
7WhisperingZephyr
Sorry for the delay. Interesting chapter.
Can't say exactly why, but there's something... off about Zephu, even for an AI. I can understand why Detective Laurent doesn't trust him. The interaction between James and Adrian was rather realistic, too.
Did spot of few typos, but that didn't stop me from remaining enthralled throughout.
Eager for the next update.
-WZ
7WhisperingZephyrSorry for the delay. Interesting chapter.
Can't say exactly why, but there's something... off about Zephu, even for an AI. I can understand why Detective Laurent doesn't trust him. The interaction between James and Adrian was rather realistic, too.
Did spot of few typos, but that didn't stop me from remaining enthralled throughout.
Eager for the next update.
-WZ
6/5/2014 c1 WhisperingZephyr
A great beginning. Very imaginative.
Just enough description, and the dialogue was well-done. Detective Laurent's inner musing were perhaps the most entertaining aspect.
Did notice one typo: in the third paragraph, I believe you misspelled "heart" as "herat".
The only real flaw I can see with this is that I could have been a bit longer. Regardless, I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
-WZ
A great beginning. Very imaginative.
Just enough description, and the dialogue was well-done. Detective Laurent's inner musing were perhaps the most entertaining aspect.
Did notice one typo: in the third paragraph, I believe you misspelled "heart" as "herat".
The only real flaw I can see with this is that I could have been a bit longer. Regardless, I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
-WZ