
1/26/2015 c1
1Tosha Goff
This is an interesting little story. The details are wonderfully written and it felt more like a high school novel rather than a short story about a part of your life that you've experienced. It's nicely wrote, but there's some errors here and there. There was only, like, a couple, so it's not something to drop everything you're doing and go back and fix it (which I would never say to do, just trying to lighten up my review). I can't wait to read your other story when it comes out now! Please do contact me when you get it uploaded! :D

This is an interesting little story. The details are wonderfully written and it felt more like a high school novel rather than a short story about a part of your life that you've experienced. It's nicely wrote, but there's some errors here and there. There was only, like, a couple, so it's not something to drop everything you're doing and go back and fix it (which I would never say to do, just trying to lighten up my review). I can't wait to read your other story when it comes out now! Please do contact me when you get it uploaded! :D
8/6/2014 c1
1PIK
Wow! This is really good! I agree with Queen-Of-Coney-Island, you make this seem fictional, like some sort of short mystery story, instead of something that happened to you. You write really well and your descriptions are really good. You had me very intrigued the whole story, I enjoyed this. Very good job.

Wow! This is really good! I agree with Queen-Of-Coney-Island, you make this seem fictional, like some sort of short mystery story, instead of something that happened to you. You write really well and your descriptions are really good. You had me very intrigued the whole story, I enjoyed this. Very good job.
6/17/2014 c1
2Queen-Of-Coney-Island
That was really good! With the way it was written, you made it seem fictional, not at all like a journal entry! You have superb grammar :)

That was really good! With the way it was written, you made it seem fictional, not at all like a journal entry! You have superb grammar :)