for Red Grass4/22/2016 c2 
20DevilPogoStick
Wow, this is quite dark when it all comes together after some thought. I mean it gets to the point you wish this character managed to escape and find a way out of the situation, but nothing comes...And that's disheartening but attracts attention that there is a continuation.
...I sure hope so. XD
Keep it up!
20DevilPogoStickWow, this is quite dark when it all comes together after some thought. I mean it gets to the point you wish this character managed to escape and find a way out of the situation, but nothing comes...And that's disheartening but attracts attention that there is a continuation.
...I sure hope so. XD
Keep it up!
4/21/2016 c1 DevilPogoStick
...Wow, I did not expect a poem to be honest. The fact that each part is in fact a bit of a short tale of various characters shows a lot of work and thought was put into this. It was emotional in a sense as some verses are uplifting but some are depressing, as you can see what it sums up for each character. I got to say, it is well done poetry. Keep up the good work!
...Wow, I did not expect a poem to be honest. The fact that each part is in fact a bit of a short tale of various characters shows a lot of work and thought was put into this. It was emotional in a sense as some verses are uplifting but some are depressing, as you can see what it sums up for each character. I got to say, it is well done poetry. Keep up the good work!
4/20/2016 c5 6Darth Zannacross
Sounds like Mister Freeze, Captain Cold or other cold loving criminal wrote this, oh well.
6Darth ZannacrossSounds like Mister Freeze, Captain Cold or other cold loving criminal wrote this, oh well.
4/19/2016 c4 Darth Zannacross
This Rachel sounds like she could use a cat, sounds like she is not happy at her race, oh well.
This Rachel sounds like she could use a cat, sounds like she is not happy at her race, oh well.
4/18/2016 c3 Darth Zannacross
Not really sure what to say about this other then its, heroic and religious?
Not really sure what to say about this other then its, heroic and religious?
4/17/2016 c2 Darth Zannacross
So, this is going to be one very long poem I see, well, I'm not much of a poem person, the words seem, nice at least.
Sounds like the person in this chapter is quite depressed, arg.
So, this is going to be one very long poem I see, well, I'm not much of a poem person, the words seem, nice at least.
Sounds like the person in this chapter is quite depressed, arg.
4/16/2016 c1 Darth Zannacross
Oh my, this is indeed quite different then your other stories. This, suppose to be some foreshadowing?
This reminds me of the short speeches they have before the start of the Kingdom Hearts games, all I can tell is that we have a cast that might be full of anguish, guess I will see. Well, time to start this song that never ends.
Oh my, this is indeed quite different then your other stories. This, suppose to be some foreshadowing?
This reminds me of the short speeches they have before the start of the Kingdom Hearts games, all I can tell is that we have a cast that might be full of anguish, guess I will see. Well, time to start this song that never ends.
8/6/2014 c1 13360pages
I'm surprised you actually did this, it almost seems like a musical, but with even less exposition and just the songs. Which makes it really hard to tell the story,
I also have a nagging feeling that this should probably be a poetry, and reading Song lyrics without any music accompaniment can be difficult.
From what I can see the story is about two people, a boy and a girl, one who dreams of something more in life. The other just wanting some more simple, even if he isn't completely happy with his family life.
13360pagesI'm surprised you actually did this, it almost seems like a musical, but with even less exposition and just the songs. Which makes it really hard to tell the story,
I also have a nagging feeling that this should probably be a poetry, and reading Song lyrics without any music accompaniment can be difficult.
From what I can see the story is about two people, a boy and a girl, one who dreams of something more in life. The other just wanting some more simple, even if he isn't completely happy with his family life.