for Darker Than Black (Hybrid Descent 1)10/8/2014 c19 Annabelle Nicole Campbell
4hrs rest due to a school across the st. so, the marathon is back on. Is this the scene that relates to Deam freaking out at a computer w/ the night club owner in the background ...back when she was vision questing w/ her wolf?
4hrs rest due to a school across the st. so, the marathon is back on. Is this the scene that relates to Deam freaking out at a computer w/ the night club owner in the background ...back when she was vision questing w/ her wolf?
10/8/2014 c18 Annabelle Nicole Campbell
Well it has been a little over 24hrs & I can't see...my marathon with your beautiful story is on hold. This chapter made my heart ache for both of them. I'm glad they r back together again.
Well it has been a little over 24hrs & I can't see...my marathon with your beautiful story is on hold. This chapter made my heart ache for both of them. I'm glad they r back together again.
10/8/2014 c17 Annabelle Nicole Campbell
Ty for a story that has me gasping in shock, laughing in complete humor, and crying in related sadness. You have outdone yourself so far. I'm awake w/ u'r story almost a flush 24 hrs now...good thing I'm use to this insomnia like behavior that good stories draw out of me...that should tell you a lot about what your story does to its readers. 1 gazillion thumbs up!
Ty for a story that has me gasping in shock, laughing in complete humor, and crying in related sadness. You have outdone yourself so far. I'm awake w/ u'r story almost a flush 24 hrs now...good thing I'm use to this insomnia like behavior that good stories draw out of me...that should tell you a lot about what your story does to its readers. 1 gazillion thumbs up!
10/7/2014 c16 Annabelle Nicole Campbell
I appreciate your work. Please don't get disheartened by the lack of reviews. Many people see reviews as socializing but only use the site as a sort of free library. I wrote Vampire Night on and had the same experience with my reviewers. My only advice to you is for you to take solace in the stats of each chapter. My story started with over 300 viewers for chapters 1 & 2 but they averaged out to about 50/chapter. If viewer numbers plum it, then either ppl are taking their time reading or they lost interest. I think stats over time is your best gauge. For now just trust us little numbered reviewers and know you are awesome!
I appreciate your work. Please don't get disheartened by the lack of reviews. Many people see reviews as socializing but only use the site as a sort of free library. I wrote Vampire Night on and had the same experience with my reviewers. My only advice to you is for you to take solace in the stats of each chapter. My story started with over 300 viewers for chapters 1 & 2 but they averaged out to about 50/chapter. If viewer numbers plum it, then either ppl are taking their time reading or they lost interest. I think stats over time is your best gauge. For now just trust us little numbered reviewers and know you are awesome!
10/7/2014 c15 Annabelle Nicole Campbell
Your story has me so enthralled, that my eyes have been glued to it for the past 20 hours...no lie. I want to pull an all nighter if it takes, just so I can finish it because it has me captive. Thank you for such an amazing story. Your detail and relationships are pro.
Your story has me so enthralled, that my eyes have been glued to it for the past 20 hours...no lie. I want to pull an all nighter if it takes, just so I can finish it because it has me captive. Thank you for such an amazing story. Your detail and relationships are pro.
10/7/2014 c22 Andrea
Amazing, as always :) can't wait to read what happens next! Still has an amazing plot, plus your writing just seems to keep getting better!
Amazing, as always :) can't wait to read what happens next! Still has an amazing plot, plus your writing just seems to keep getting better!
10/4/2014 c21 Andrea
Awesome chapter! I can't wait for the next one! :)
Awesome chapter! I can't wait for the next one! :)
9/24/2014 c19 Andrea
Ah, a clif hanger. Great chapter by the way ;) can't wait for more
Ah, a clif hanger. Great chapter by the way ;) can't wait for more
9/23/2014 c18 Andrea
Whoa. This is an amazing story, and I would love to read more of it! Very well written and well rounded characters, plus, awesome sex and fighting scenes. Can't wait for the next chapter :)
Whoa. This is an amazing story, and I would love to read more of it! Very well written and well rounded characters, plus, awesome sex and fighting scenes. Can't wait for the next chapter :)
9/20/2014 c17 Blackrain7557
So where to begin. First off I'd like to say that your story is well done, well paced and a very good read. I like your characters and the interactions, and the humor present is appreciated. A trend I have noticed is that early chapters felt very rushed and lacking in transitions, you'd skip from one scene to another which left a jarring effect while trying to read it. I'd suggest that if you're going to do a scene change make it noticeable, or blend the work together a little better.
Early on there are a lot of mistakes, particularly with spelling and grammar, you seem to have knocked a lot of it out in the later chapters. Mostly it seems like things people usually miss, and things we fill in while reading anyways, but I'd suggest taking a look back through to correct it.
Roderick: pretty much my favorite character, nuff said.
Your characters are interesting, Daem is amusing, and it's nice to see that they're not the stereotypes everyone makes them out to be in various works of fiction. Also Warlocks, awesome.
In all seriousness you've got something good here, don't let the lack of reviews stop you. It's a hard thing to watch, and wonder if people don't like what you've written or are just ignoring the option, but push forward, you've got a good thing here.
So where to begin. First off I'd like to say that your story is well done, well paced and a very good read. I like your characters and the interactions, and the humor present is appreciated. A trend I have noticed is that early chapters felt very rushed and lacking in transitions, you'd skip from one scene to another which left a jarring effect while trying to read it. I'd suggest that if you're going to do a scene change make it noticeable, or blend the work together a little better.
Early on there are a lot of mistakes, particularly with spelling and grammar, you seem to have knocked a lot of it out in the later chapters. Mostly it seems like things people usually miss, and things we fill in while reading anyways, but I'd suggest taking a look back through to correct it.
Roderick: pretty much my favorite character, nuff said.
Your characters are interesting, Daem is amusing, and it's nice to see that they're not the stereotypes everyone makes them out to be in various works of fiction. Also Warlocks, awesome.
In all seriousness you've got something good here, don't let the lack of reviews stop you. It's a hard thing to watch, and wonder if people don't like what you've written or are just ignoring the option, but push forward, you've got a good thing here.
8/15/2014 c12 story
so sad
so sad
8/13/2014 c10 story
good story, well rounded character's, and that vamp! wowza
good story, well rounded character's, and that vamp! wowza