for The Institute3/31/2015 c3 Deleteplease2day
I randomly came across your story, and in the true spirit of RPing, it is very apparent that you are passionate about world-building as well as developing the relationships between your characters. However, for some reason, I found it overwhelming-and then again, some parts were underwhelming. Don't know about you, but after the popularity of films such as Frozen and Rise of the Guardians, frost powers seem kind of blasé to begin with. Also, I don't know how to explain it, but its almost as if there is too much going on in this larger-than-life piece of high fantasy. It seems like it would be better suited to a different format. Like a comic or something. Tough to explain, just thought to give you some honest feedback-not like I'm the best writer myself (I'd appreciate the same level of criticism:P)
I randomly came across your story, and in the true spirit of RPing, it is very apparent that you are passionate about world-building as well as developing the relationships between your characters. However, for some reason, I found it overwhelming-and then again, some parts were underwhelming. Don't know about you, but after the popularity of films such as Frozen and Rise of the Guardians, frost powers seem kind of blasé to begin with. Also, I don't know how to explain it, but its almost as if there is too much going on in this larger-than-life piece of high fantasy. It seems like it would be better suited to a different format. Like a comic or something. Tough to explain, just thought to give you some honest feedback-not like I'm the best writer myself (I'd appreciate the same level of criticism:P)
8/29/2014 c2 Deborah
Must . . . have . . . more of this. Awesome job! Keep it up. one thing i was kind of wondering about was how old lloyd exactly is though, but kiyan is such a cutie!
Must . . . have . . . more of this. Awesome job! Keep it up. one thing i was kind of wondering about was how old lloyd exactly is though, but kiyan is such a cutie!
8/17/2014 c1 
1Manga.Head
OMG this is soo good. Denfintly worth it. It seems like a really interesting story and it's written so beautifully. I've already fallen in love with 't wait for the next update :D
1Manga.HeadOMG this is soo good. Denfintly worth it. It seems like a really interesting story and it's written so beautifully. I've already fallen in love with 't wait for the next update :D