9/9/2014 c1 4Clara E. Taylor
Try developing this into a more in depth story. There are many questions left unanswered, especially about the end. Who said she could stay in Eden? Why did her friend run away? What caused her to fade away? Why did she go to 'nothing'? Is there a moral? (Some nice use of words here. Intriguing idea.)
Try developing this into a more in depth story. There are many questions left unanswered, especially about the end. Who said she could stay in Eden? Why did her friend run away? What caused her to fade away? Why did she go to 'nothing'? Is there a moral? (Some nice use of words here. Intriguing idea.)