for Sunday Sins9/17/2014 c3 Guest
Wow...seems quite crazy if ya ask me
Wow...seems quite crazy if ya ask me
9/10/2014 c2 
3Site-3
This story just took a turn for the worst. Its only what... 2 more days? Just jack off dude you didnt have to rape anyone...
3Site-3This story just took a turn for the worst. Its only what... 2 more days? Just jack off dude you didnt have to rape anyone...
9/9/2014 c1 2Orgaya
Wow, this turned out better than I was expecting.
To start, at first the prose was a little odd, what with the syntax sort of being all over the place. It seemed to go away, however, as the story went on - that or I just stopped noticing it.
As for the story itself, I was very hesitant given the fact that this was going to be a story about an escort, and I was worried that I would just be reading smut. And as I began to read it, yeah, that's what I got. I did, though, enjoy how much of a loser Drew was when he was believing himself to be so cool with his shades. When Sasha showed up, I was again getting more frightened that this was going to turn into a sex romp.
However, as the conversation went on, I started to realize that I was actually becoming very invested. Nothing about it was contrived - everything felt naturally flowing, and it was a rather ingenious move to introduce the character through a client. That way it wasn't through dry exposition. And this showed up later when Sasha was talking with Matt and Janice when talking about Lou - it was gossip. Not narrative exposition. And these conversations were very enjoyable to read, especially between Sasha and Drew. It was very pointed, and I realized that so too was this story.
I'm also a fan of stories about characters teetering on keeping their humanity and becoming dead to the world. I do look forward to seeing how this will all develop.
2OrgayaWow, this turned out better than I was expecting.
To start, at first the prose was a little odd, what with the syntax sort of being all over the place. It seemed to go away, however, as the story went on - that or I just stopped noticing it.
As for the story itself, I was very hesitant given the fact that this was going to be a story about an escort, and I was worried that I would just be reading smut. And as I began to read it, yeah, that's what I got. I did, though, enjoy how much of a loser Drew was when he was believing himself to be so cool with his shades. When Sasha showed up, I was again getting more frightened that this was going to turn into a sex romp.
However, as the conversation went on, I started to realize that I was actually becoming very invested. Nothing about it was contrived - everything felt naturally flowing, and it was a rather ingenious move to introduce the character through a client. That way it wasn't through dry exposition. And this showed up later when Sasha was talking with Matt and Janice when talking about Lou - it was gossip. Not narrative exposition. And these conversations were very enjoyable to read, especially between Sasha and Drew. It was very pointed, and I realized that so too was this story.
I'm also a fan of stories about characters teetering on keeping their humanity and becoming dead to the world. I do look forward to seeing how this will all develop.
9/9/2014 c1 13alltheeagles
For the Review Game (Easy Fix)
I like Sasha’s character, particularly how he doesn’t blab too much about himself, because I have a personal dislike of talkative submissives. Granted, it’s not been determined yet whether Sasha is a submissive, but from the way Drew thinks about him, he probably will end up as one.
I didn’t enjoy the last third of the chapter as much as I did the beginning, mainly because it felt a little rushed and lecture-like with the back story being crammed into those few paragraphs. Having said that, I didn’t hate it or anything, I just felt that the pacing went slightly awry suddenly.
Anyway, I’m still interested enough to want to read more, so that’s good!
13alltheeaglesFor the Review Game (Easy Fix)
I like Sasha’s character, particularly how he doesn’t blab too much about himself, because I have a personal dislike of talkative submissives. Granted, it’s not been determined yet whether Sasha is a submissive, but from the way Drew thinks about him, he probably will end up as one.
I didn’t enjoy the last third of the chapter as much as I did the beginning, mainly because it felt a little rushed and lecture-like with the back story being crammed into those few paragraphs. Having said that, I didn’t hate it or anything, I just felt that the pacing went slightly awry suddenly.
Anyway, I’m still interested enough to want to read more, so that’s good!
9/8/2014 c1 3Site-3
these are amazing new stories youre making. jesus i want to follow each character to their grave! the detail and feelings you put forth with them strikes a heart string with me personally. I hope you finish all these new stories and dont burn yourself out. Pace yourself, youre a wonderful writer with a beautiful imagination.
3Site-3these are amazing new stories youre making. jesus i want to follow each character to their grave! the detail and feelings you put forth with them strikes a heart string with me personally. I hope you finish all these new stories and dont burn yourself out. Pace yourself, youre a wonderful writer with a beautiful imagination.