for Until our feet meet the shore10/8/2015 c1 
8rchll
I love the way you write. Your choice of how you break up your lines and stanzas is very interesting. The standalone "to the hardwood", for example, is brilliant. Also, "you who was unbearably dear to me,". I'm not sure if this poem is about a father or a lover - the descriptions are so tender I feel it could be either. There is some lovely concrete imagery in this piece, really wonderful. The last line left me a little confused though!
8rchllI love the way you write. Your choice of how you break up your lines and stanzas is very interesting. The standalone "to the hardwood", for example, is brilliant. Also, "you who was unbearably dear to me,". I'm not sure if this poem is about a father or a lover - the descriptions are so tender I feel it could be either. There is some lovely concrete imagery in this piece, really wonderful. The last line left me a little confused though!
9/11/2014 c1 arktoi
such a lovable structure, I want to be lost in it.
such a lovable structure, I want to be lost in it.
9/11/2014 c1 8Ptolemaeus
I had to reread this a few time. And I will keep rereading it. It's fantastic. I love the repetition mirroring thought, the word usage, and imagery.
8PtolemaeusI had to reread this a few time. And I will keep rereading it. It's fantastic. I love the repetition mirroring thought, the word usage, and imagery.