for In the Moment2/15/2016 c1 
38Starart152
This story was short and sweet between Hoy and Raum. It is fun to see who they are a strange and ordinary couple at the same time.
Compare to your more recent work there is more small mistakes in it, but it means you got much better during one year and almost and half.
38Starart152This story was short and sweet between Hoy and Raum. It is fun to see who they are a strange and ordinary couple at the same time.
Compare to your more recent work there is more small mistakes in it, but it means you got much better during one year and almost and half.
10/15/2014 c1 3My21Heartbeats
I love the idea of them being together but also being different. I think this is a very salient point that this work achieves. I enjoyed the characterizations and you made me feel for the characters in a unique way. This is a wonderful one shot.
3My21HeartbeatsI love the idea of them being together but also being different. I think this is a very salient point that this work achieves. I enjoyed the characterizations and you made me feel for the characters in a unique way. This is a wonderful one shot.
9/26/2014 c1 4Kouki
A lot of small errors here, mainly using the wrong word; Was instead of were, starring instead of staring and play instead of pay. You also seem to split the sentences up weirdly, cutting off complete thoughts and continuing them in a completely different sentence.
Well, it's just a one-shot so I understand why you'd be a little lax; I do enjoy the premise though, they sound like they have a really simple love and I kind of like that. I guess you could say, despite her being an alien, their love is really-
Down to earth
(I'm sorry you had to read that)
4KoukiA lot of small errors here, mainly using the wrong word; Was instead of were, starring instead of staring and play instead of pay. You also seem to split the sentences up weirdly, cutting off complete thoughts and continuing them in a completely different sentence.
Well, it's just a one-shot so I understand why you'd be a little lax; I do enjoy the premise though, they sound like they have a really simple love and I kind of like that. I guess you could say, despite her being an alien, their love is really-
Down to earth
(I'm sorry you had to read that)
9/25/2014 c1 2YumehaMinakami
Oh dude! I'm crying. Somehow this reminded mo of the relationship of Shiki and Arcueid (I hope I spelled that right).
The romance here is deep yet not overly, a nice easy read.
2YumehaMinakamiOh dude! I'm crying. Somehow this reminded mo of the relationship of Shiki and Arcueid (I hope I spelled that right).
The romance here is deep yet not overly, a nice easy read.