for Dead Star11/11/2014 c1 crushedbywords
This is a well written one-shot, but perhaps a bit more about Lucas could be of help in connecting to him. Maybe more in how his crew died, what made the ship's computer system almost die out completely. I would say more in how Lucas is feeling.
Still, I think you did a nice job with your writing here.
This is a well written one-shot, but perhaps a bit more about Lucas could be of help in connecting to him. Maybe more in how his crew died, what made the ship's computer system almost die out completely. I would say more in how Lucas is feeling.
Still, I think you did a nice job with your writing here.