for Le Maree Della Guerra (The Tides of War)4/16/2017 c20 
1Dark Lord Cthulhu
I was hoping that Hiroto wouldn't get caught. I hope he doesn't die.
1Dark Lord CthulhuI was hoping that Hiroto wouldn't get caught. I hope he doesn't die.
4/14/2017 c20 Tragedy of Light and Dark II
Hiroto's freakouts actually did get him caught. What will Topeka do to him? He wasn't wrong about Topeka knowing where he was, or screwing with him either. I hope he can get through this.
Hiroto's freakouts actually did get him caught. What will Topeka do to him? He wasn't wrong about Topeka knowing where he was, or screwing with him either. I hope he can get through this.
4/6/2017 c20 1Black Bride Anna
Oh man Looks like Hiroto got caught. I wonder what Topeka will do to him.
1Black Bride AnnaOh man Looks like Hiroto got caught. I wonder what Topeka will do to him.
3/21/2017 c1 6WolfGoesBaa
Well you certainly spun a web of mystery around this mermaid army attack. Your characters are interesting and its nice to see the different interactions between them and your writing is very descriptive.
I have to wonder about why the Sea Kings would not act more suspiciously to an outsider (who knows little about their kingdom) being in the middle of this recently destroyed mystery army.
I sought you out [in] specifically for this job - (?)
...the edge [of] his voice was enough to make the warning - [in?]
...what kind of relationship [they] two of them had. - [the]
It was good chapter.
6WolfGoesBaaWell you certainly spun a web of mystery around this mermaid army attack. Your characters are interesting and its nice to see the different interactions between them and your writing is very descriptive.
I have to wonder about why the Sea Kings would not act more suspiciously to an outsider (who knows little about their kingdom) being in the middle of this recently destroyed mystery army.
I sought you out [in] specifically for this job - (?)
...the edge [of] his voice was enough to make the warning - [in?]
...what kind of relationship [they] two of them had. - [the]
It was good chapter.
3/15/2017 c19 1Black Bride Anna
Nice mentally horror chapter you have going here. I really enjoy seeing Hiroto freak out so much.
1Black Bride AnnaNice mentally horror chapter you have going here. I really enjoy seeing Hiroto freak out so much.
3/15/2017 c18 Black Bride Anna
It was a little confusing but I think it was the fact that I read this near 3 in the morning. Hiroto's adventures are very entertaining and funny. I enjoy them.
It was a little confusing but I think it was the fact that I read this near 3 in the morning. Hiroto's adventures are very entertaining and funny. I enjoy them.
3/15/2017 c18 KurlozMakara77
hiroto is really going insane in this chapter. poor guy. i hope he can get out of this hell soon.
hiroto is really going insane in this chapter. poor guy. i hope he can get out of this hell soon.
3/15/2017 c19 HFGLF 2
Hiroto is hiding from the generals and it plays on his mentality. I think anything like this would make someone very nervous and on edge. I can say that I am not surprised that he got caught with freakouts like that. I wonder what Topeka is going to do to him now that he has him caught.
Hiroto is hiding from the generals and it plays on his mentality. I think anything like this would make someone very nervous and on edge. I can say that I am not surprised that he got caught with freakouts like that. I wonder what Topeka is going to do to him now that he has him caught.
3/14/2017 c18 HFGLF 2
Not much is happening here except for solving puzzles and Hiroto being...Hiroto. I love his reactions to everything. It's nice to go on an adventure with a funny character who tries to act badass but really isn't.
Not much is happening here except for solving puzzles and Hiroto being...Hiroto. I love his reactions to everything. It's nice to go on an adventure with a funny character who tries to act badass but really isn't.
3/14/2017 c19 8Kurogane Black Ninja
Hiroto is suffering from the biggest mental breakdown as he tries to wire cameras to avoid getting caught but I have a feeling at least one of the generals has it out for him.
8Kurogane Black NinjaHiroto is suffering from the biggest mental breakdown as he tries to wire cameras to avoid getting caught but I have a feeling at least one of the generals has it out for him.
3/14/2017 c18 Kurogane Black Ninja
As Hiroto descends into the Deep Sea, he continues to become entangled in more and more sticky situations. He ran into a guard and now I'm sure that there's something bad in the future waiting for him.
As Hiroto descends into the Deep Sea, he continues to become entangled in more and more sticky situations. He ran into a guard and now I'm sure that there's something bad in the future waiting for him.
3/12/2017 c19 TerminalTragedy
Hiroto is always on edge. I wonder if he's going to get caught again. Maybe that guard told the generals and that's why Topeka is hanging around him so much.
Hiroto is always on edge. I wonder if he's going to get caught again. Maybe that guard told the generals and that's why Topeka is hanging around him so much.
3/12/2017 c18 TerminalTragedy
It looks like Hiroto was going somewhere for a while. I really do hope the guard doesn't catch him too but I don't think that will happen because he got knocked out.
It looks like Hiroto was going somewhere for a while. I really do hope the guard doesn't catch him too but I don't think that will happen because he got knocked out.