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11Madcinder
Well, looks like we need a new one. This one's broken.
I'm actually very not sure what he was thinking right there. Like, I'd like to understand this, but I feel like I have to read the rest to get anything I saw in this chapter. Not terribly happy about that, but I'll keep reading. A story is supposed to continue, aye?
11MadcinderWell, looks like we need a new one. This one's broken.
I'm actually very not sure what he was thinking right there. Like, I'd like to understand this, but I feel like I have to read the rest to get anything I saw in this chapter. Not terribly happy about that, but I'll keep reading. A story is supposed to continue, aye?
2/10/2015 c7 9cmaej
This remind me of the time I went on the gentlemen's club thread and shot everyone with dismembered dicks. Got Kro right on the forehead. Then Boom intervened and forced me to returned all the dismembered dicks packed in ice.
Didn't that from the Wu-Tang Clan (rap group) cut of his dick and tried to kill himself by jumping off a building? You get your inspiration from the strangest places, Dan. ;)
And Officer Miyazaki... *drills annoying, moe voice out of head*
9cmaejThis remind me of the time I went on the gentlemen's club thread and shot everyone with dismembered dicks. Got Kro right on the forehead. Then Boom intervened and forced me to returned all the dismembered dicks packed in ice.
Didn't that from the Wu-Tang Clan (rap group) cut of his dick and tried to kill himself by jumping off a building? You get your inspiration from the strangest places, Dan. ;)
And Officer Miyazaki... *drills annoying, moe voice out of head*
2/9/2015 c2 11Madcinder
Don't trust her! She's an alien from the future and she's going to kill absolutely everybody!
*ahem* So... who shot the dude? Was it Dianne or Anne? I doubt Damien. Short chapter, so I can't think of anything else to say.
11MadcinderDon't trust her! She's an alien from the future and she's going to kill absolutely everybody!
*ahem* So... who shot the dude? Was it Dianne or Anne? I doubt Damien. Short chapter, so I can't think of anything else to say.
2/9/2015 c41 6Darth Zannacross
Well,lucky for Damien it seems aliens at least are not totally obsessed with eradicating bedrooms lol. If he keeps saying he is not a typical hero he is going to transform in to one before he knows it lol.
I suppose the usual insanity seems toned back today, but its cool that it feels like a old school resident Evil vibe with all the uncovering stuff. His staff seems troubled about just how out of the loop they really are with what is going on, hopefully when they do get in the loop the loop does not turn them to dinner.
I do wonder why someone would name themselves a depressing Panda unless they want to spread misery everywhere they go, misery does love company, lets see what the panda knows about the Promethus. Tension indeed, so lets see where it leads. Keep up the work that is good Daniel, till next time.
6Darth ZannacrossWell,lucky for Damien it seems aliens at least are not totally obsessed with eradicating bedrooms lol. If he keeps saying he is not a typical hero he is going to transform in to one before he knows it lol.
I suppose the usual insanity seems toned back today, but its cool that it feels like a old school resident Evil vibe with all the uncovering stuff. His staff seems troubled about just how out of the loop they really are with what is going on, hopefully when they do get in the loop the loop does not turn them to dinner.
I do wonder why someone would name themselves a depressing Panda unless they want to spread misery everywhere they go, misery does love company, lets see what the panda knows about the Promethus. Tension indeed, so lets see where it leads. Keep up the work that is good Daniel, till next time.
2/9/2015 c5 9cmaej
Took a break to watch gay porn, but now I'm back.
Actually, it's playing on the incognito window as I type.
Just be glad I'm not on voice chat.
ONWARD!
The seven-finger gloves made me facedesk. w;
And you still got me. I was sure Shoji was dead.
"Yes, I can smell their hormones..."
Did you smell like buttsecks? *shot*
When Anastasia describe the scientific way she altered the Yakuza, I was going to ask why didn't she just take the simpler approach and make them eunuchs. But I see great minds think alike. ;)
"Smiling, she fondly produces a large..."
OMG, I thought she was gonna pull out a dismembered dick. XD
9cmaejTook a break to watch gay porn, but now I'm back.
Actually, it's playing on the incognito window as I type.
Just be glad I'm not on voice chat.
ONWARD!
The seven-finger gloves made me facedesk. w;
And you still got me. I was sure Shoji was dead.
"Yes, I can smell their hormones..."
Did you smell like buttsecks? *shot*
When Anastasia describe the scientific way she altered the Yakuza, I was going to ask why didn't she just take the simpler approach and make them eunuchs. But I see great minds think alike. ;)
"Smiling, she fondly produces a large..."
OMG, I thought she was gonna pull out a dismembered dick. XD
2/9/2015 c4 cmaej
Well, that went from full-flown retard to dark quick as hell! I was actually joking about the gangbang rape. ._.
All the murda.
The humanity.
The buttsecks... wat?
Nevermind. ;)
Well, that went from full-flown retard to dark quick as hell! I was actually joking about the gangbang rape. ._.
All the murda.
The humanity.
The buttsecks... wat?
Nevermind. ;)
2/9/2015 c1 39Starart152
The first chapter is not so bad. The action is really interesting for the beginning.
The crisis create a tension with the group, but I'm not sure about the character. There's not a lot of detail, but I can only guess they are young adult.
There is one sentence I don't understand: « Who are we says he? ». I'm not sure if it's a mistake or the character way he talks.
39Starart152The first chapter is not so bad. The action is really interesting for the beginning.
The crisis create a tension with the group, but I'm not sure about the character. There's not a lot of detail, but I can only guess they are young adult.
There is one sentence I don't understand: « Who are we says he? ». I'm not sure if it's a mistake or the character way he talks.
2/9/2015 c3 9cmaej
Trust Shoji with the GRENADES!? I can see him pulling out the safety pin and passing out at Damien's feet, with the damn grenade still in his hand. And Dianne immediately swears at Damien at his stupidity before they fly to the moon. lol
Is "debrain" a word? (suddenly thinks about "unopenable")
Go ahead, Damien. Murda your sister so she's not kidnapped and destroy any hopes of a gang-rape scene. I don't care what those otakus want!
I'm gonna assume that Anastasia isn't really dead, based on my experience with your trolling writing and THAT THE STORY'S TITLE IS NAMED AFTER HER FOR FUCK'S SAKES!
9cmaejTrust Shoji with the GRENADES!? I can see him pulling out the safety pin and passing out at Damien's feet, with the damn grenade still in his hand. And Dianne immediately swears at Damien at his stupidity before they fly to the moon. lol
Is "debrain" a word? (suddenly thinks about "unopenable")
Go ahead, Damien. Murda your sister so she's not kidnapped and destroy any hopes of a gang-rape scene. I don't care what those otakus want!
I'm gonna assume that Anastasia isn't really dead, based on my experience with your trolling writing and THAT THE STORY'S TITLE IS NAMED AFTER HER FOR FUCK'S SAKES!
2/9/2015 c2 cmaej
Can't Damien and Dianne just run and hope that the dogs maul the girl instead? You don't have to outrun hunting dogs, just outrun the slowest person. XD
If Damien was 360's Isaac, he'll yell at the mysterious girl for smashing his butler. He'll then not call Souji by name, but yell, "Buuuuuuuuuuuuuuutleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeer!" in the most angsty way possible.
I'm calling P.E.T.A. on Dianne. *buries Kana's kin*
Multi-billion yen is multi-million dollars in Murica. I guess that's still impressive.
When the hell did you start writing in present tense, Dan?! o.O
Can't Damien and Dianne just run and hope that the dogs maul the girl instead? You don't have to outrun hunting dogs, just outrun the slowest person. XD
If Damien was 360's Isaac, he'll yell at the mysterious girl for smashing his butler. He'll then not call Souji by name, but yell, "Buuuuuuuuuuuuuuutleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeer!" in the most angsty way possible.
I'm calling P.E.T.A. on Dianne. *buries Kana's kin*
Multi-billion yen is multi-million dollars in Murica. I guess that's still impressive.
When the hell did you start writing in present tense, Dan?! o.O
2/9/2015 c1 cmaej
Shoji The butler in The Big O.
Dianne Tsukiko with a badassed, bear version of Mr. Stuffy Paws.
Damien That MC on The Slenderman who can't run for shit and starts gasping for air even though he's about to get murda'd and should be hauling ass.
Flying Saucer Da fuq?
Well, I see I'm in for a ride, so I'll give you one, too. ;)
Shoji The butler in The Big O.
Dianne Tsukiko with a badassed, bear version of Mr. Stuffy Paws.
Damien That MC on The Slenderman who can't run for shit and starts gasping for air even though he's about to get murda'd and should be hauling ass.
Flying Saucer Da fuq?
Well, I see I'm in for a ride, so I'll give you one, too. ;)
2/9/2015 c1 11Madcinder
A giant flying saucer. Darn it, God, stop throwing your tea set everywhere.
Not that anything makes sense yet, but I'm sure there's a perfectly rational explanation for everything that's just happened. Except for the unholy amounts of pink in that room, of course. Anyhow, after the introduction of the three characters we can see right now, we don't really know that much. You know, like, what the heck is going on?
I gather that they're rich, and that rich people have enemies, and those guys with the rocket launcher are probably their enemies. I saw how old the kids are. I saw what kind of clothes he wears, and that she keeps guns under her pillow. But I don't really know the characters yet. I can't wait to see what they're actually normally like. But, of course, normal seems a long ways off.
11MadcinderA giant flying saucer. Darn it, God, stop throwing your tea set everywhere.
Not that anything makes sense yet, but I'm sure there's a perfectly rational explanation for everything that's just happened. Except for the unholy amounts of pink in that room, of course. Anyhow, after the introduction of the three characters we can see right now, we don't really know that much. You know, like, what the heck is going on?
I gather that they're rich, and that rich people have enemies, and those guys with the rocket launcher are probably their enemies. I saw how old the kids are. I saw what kind of clothes he wears, and that she keeps guns under her pillow. But I don't really know the characters yet. I can't wait to see what they're actually normally like. But, of course, normal seems a long ways off.
2/9/2015 c1 some1eleven
Okay, Dan... What on Earth did I just read? O v O;;
Sure enough, it's funny. Heck, it's hillarious. And it certainly makes no sense whatsoever. And that works. You did tell us to prepare for the ride, and a ride it is. The kind of a ride where you're tempted to scream "I have no idea what's going on, but WOO-HOOOOOO!". And not in the Sims way, just to make it clear.
The only thing I'm worried about is, it's just the first chapter.
It's just Chapter 1, and it already blatantly refuses to make sense u Again, it works. Yet still, there's one thing that I'm really terrified about... If this is what chapter 1, then what will chapter 2 be like? Because there will have to be a chapter 2, and you know what the smart man said. "Start with an earthquake, and then make the tension rise." Well, this was the earthquake of nonsense. Which means... The next thing will be the nonsense tension rising?
And that's where the comedy suddenly turns into horror 'XD
Okay, Dan... What on Earth did I just read? O v O;;
Sure enough, it's funny. Heck, it's hillarious. And it certainly makes no sense whatsoever. And that works. You did tell us to prepare for the ride, and a ride it is. The kind of a ride where you're tempted to scream "I have no idea what's going on, but WOO-HOOOOOO!". And not in the Sims way, just to make it clear.
The only thing I'm worried about is, it's just the first chapter.
It's just Chapter 1, and it already blatantly refuses to make sense u Again, it works. Yet still, there's one thing that I'm really terrified about... If this is what chapter 1, then what will chapter 2 be like? Because there will have to be a chapter 2, and you know what the smart man said. "Start with an earthquake, and then make the tension rise." Well, this was the earthquake of nonsense. Which means... The next thing will be the nonsense tension rising?
And that's where the comedy suddenly turns into horror 'XD
2/8/2015 c41 2Kenshin Kojima
And the plot thickens... Damien's conversation with Futakawa was both amusing and interesting. I felt like I learned a bit more about Futakawa. Still, I want to know more about her. I mean, who taught her how to use firearms? And who her father was and she hates him? She's an interesting character. Heck, even Shoji intrigues me too. You know, Damien's servants kind of reminds me of Black Bulter. They each have their set of skills. It's cool.
Overall, this chapter was an awesome read. Hmm... So, in two days, Damien and Dianne's parents will be legally dead. If this happens, Damien and Dianne will truly become bigger targets. I am curious to see what Damien has planned for the birthday. I am also curious to know who this person that they're referring to. I see you like to keep your readers in suspense.
Thanks for the read!
2Kenshin KojimaAnd the plot thickens... Damien's conversation with Futakawa was both amusing and interesting. I felt like I learned a bit more about Futakawa. Still, I want to know more about her. I mean, who taught her how to use firearms? And who her father was and she hates him? She's an interesting character. Heck, even Shoji intrigues me too. You know, Damien's servants kind of reminds me of Black Bulter. They each have their set of skills. It's cool.
Overall, this chapter was an awesome read. Hmm... So, in two days, Damien and Dianne's parents will be legally dead. If this happens, Damien and Dianne will truly become bigger targets. I am curious to see what Damien has planned for the birthday. I am also curious to know who this person that they're referring to. I see you like to keep your readers in suspense.
Thanks for the read!
2/1/2015 c10 13360pages
Hmm, I might have become slightly numb to the oddness of the story. I think the best use of strange events is when they are played in stark contrast to regular events or the oddness has some sanity to them. Regular show for the Former and JoJo for the latter. Which over all this is fine for this type of series, that Anesthesia is.
13360pagesHmm, I might have become slightly numb to the oddness of the story. I think the best use of strange events is when they are played in stark contrast to regular events or the oddness has some sanity to them. Regular show for the Former and JoJo for the latter. Which over all this is fine for this type of series, that Anesthesia is.