for Jason and the Argonauts Part 13/16/2015 c1 Wendy Thompson135th
'With this wife, Tyro was the only child, and it is with her that our story begins' -wordy and rambling. Try: Tyro, with who our story begins, was their only child. - OR -'Our story begins with their only child, Tyro, and the king of Iolcos, the brother of Salmoneus, Cretheus. -or something else. Just tighter and less convoluted.
Check a dictionary for the meaning of 'spurned'. It doesn't fit the context.
Tyro's experiences seem inadequate for the described result. What else has happened to her? Needs some expansion.
Drop the last paragraph: very repetitive.
Good luck.
'With this wife, Tyro was the only child, and it is with her that our story begins' -wordy and rambling. Try: Tyro, with who our story begins, was their only child. - OR -'Our story begins with their only child, Tyro, and the king of Iolcos, the brother of Salmoneus, Cretheus. -or something else. Just tighter and less convoluted.
Check a dictionary for the meaning of 'spurned'. It doesn't fit the context.
Tyro's experiences seem inadequate for the described result. What else has happened to her? Needs some expansion.
Drop the last paragraph: very repetitive.
Good luck.