for Greater Than Jake12/11/2014 c1 eliza
id like to read more! good job!
id like to read more! good job!
12/10/2014 c1 
1endlesslyrestless
Heyy there. c:
Just wanted to point out correct tagging for dialogue: "If the tag describes the dialogue, it should be a comma before the quotation mark instead of a period," she said. "If the following doesn't describe the dialogue, then it should be a period." She laughed.
Like that. Er the example/paragraph sucks but you get my point right? So for example, it should be:
"...," she simpered. And: "...," she inquired.
Aside from that, this story seems pretty promising. Looking forward to more.
1endlesslyrestlessHeyy there. c:
Just wanted to point out correct tagging for dialogue: "If the tag describes the dialogue, it should be a comma before the quotation mark instead of a period," she said. "If the following doesn't describe the dialogue, then it should be a period." She laughed.
Like that. Er the example/paragraph sucks but you get my point right? So for example, it should be:
"...," she simpered. And: "...," she inquired.
Aside from that, this story seems pretty promising. Looking forward to more.