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1/3/2020 c10 6AshtheBlueEyedPoet
Hi there!

I remember reading The Folly a long time ago, so I was eager to see what you did with the rewrite. I was not disappointed! The story flows much better now and the characters don't seem as stagnant. I've rewritten several of my stories at this point, so I understand the need to go back and clean up previous work. It took me years to do so, so it's understandable to me why there's been a period of time since your last update.

I hope you continue this story, or continue to write whatever you wish, I'm entranced by you writing style!
9/15/2018 c5 Acie
Oh yeah baby, 3am, we're destroying my sleeping schedule right before classes
12/5/2017 c10 afternoonxteax
I remember reading this story years ago and I'm so excited to have found it again! You're such a great writer and this story is still as interesting as the first time I read it - I look forward to reading the rest of it whenever you publish more!
7/15/2016 c10 Khatallyna
Hello...
I just remembered your story today.
I was hearing imagine dragons, after kind of forgetting them for a very long time, and there is a song that i associated with your story, one i like. It's "round and round" by the way. It just played and i felt a avalanche of good feelings that simply could not be fully explained. All of them associated with your story.
So... hmmm... I came back... to finaly review the story, that somehow marked my teenage years. And, if possible, to relive some of those feelings.
And i'll reread it, many times. I really love/loved it.
So... if you ever get to finish this rewritting, i'll be happy. But if you don't, just know that you marked someone eternaly.
:)
1/29/2016 c10 1locaste
I have devoured these first chapters and am eager for more! You are an extremely talented writer. I hadn't realized when I started reading however that you hadn't updated in a while. I hate getting hooked on stories and then never getting to see the ending. I would love it if you continued updating, or at least posed your old version in full so readers can satiate their need to binge read this fantastic story!
12/7/2015 c3 4AboutAs SubtleAs A FlyingBrick
The new re-write isn't capturing me, it's actually losing me. The story is getting lost with all this psychological wordy birdy stuff. Just tell the story, not teach a lecture in every paragraph. I want the old story back where it just flowed so much better. If I wanted to read about college psychology, I would read a college psychology book. This is supposed to be a sort of dark, supernatural, romance. I'm really struggling here
6/2/2015 c10 1DarkestOfNights
I'm so excited to read what happens next.
5/17/2015 c9 Moon
Excited to read the rest, please update soon!

Just a small note on dialogue-it is sometimes difficult to distinguish between Alma's roommates. Their different personalities aren't clear to me yet, and sometimes it sounds as if they all major in psychology with the content and style of their discussions.

Hope the re-write is going well!
5/2/2015 c9 DarkestOfNights
Very good dialog this chapter. As always it's a pleasure reading this story. The editing and revision is turning this piece into gold I say!
4/28/2015 c8 Pseudonym59
Hmmm, we're getting to know Alma a bit more, and to be honest, she's beginning to annoy me a bit. She's very defensive even though she KNOWS her own faults and her standoffishness is starting to become borderline stupid given the situation she's in. I suppose it'd be one thing if she was in denial, but she seems to be very self-aware and that's what gets me - her disregard of the situation that displeases her even though she knows better. That being said, I don't think she's weak. She's something but she's not weak.
4/28/2015 c7 Pseudonym59
Ugh, Alma irked me in this chapter with her stubbornness, but at least she knew she was being selfish. Plus it's all pretty hard to believe. I do like how Illias isn't going to beg her though.
4/28/2015 c5 Pseudonym59
Oh my... this got really intense really fast.
4/28/2015 c3 Pseudonym59
I never read the first one, but I like Alma in this. She's standoffish and morose (like you said), but not unlikeable. I just feel like I want to know her a little better.
4/28/2015 c2 Pseudonym59
I like Warren and Rachel. :) I like how you're setting a very realistic college setting with just a hint of "hmmmmmm".
4/28/2015 c1 Pseudonym59
I really like the tone of the story so far. It's eery. :D

Great introduction.
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