for Lessons of the World9/29/2015 c11 
1Red-Damascus-Steel
Lmaoooo I friggin' love this chapter.
I mean, aside from the fact Joseph is a total hottie... -
The relationship between Wen and Joseph was really brought to life for me here. I can totally imagine everything you've depicted. From the rock pulling, the river, the pile, our two protagonists here and their actions. Joseph and Wen; you breathe life into them. They're like real people you can bump into, ya know? You've improved a lot on these characters and have expanded them quite awesomely.
And, as always, you always get me to laugh.
As far as your philosophy goes, you raise all good points and I agree with every point you bring out.
The ending, test time lol
I love Joseph and Wen.
I'll be reading the next chapter now :)
1Red-Damascus-SteelLmaoooo I friggin' love this chapter.
I mean, aside from the fact Joseph is a total hottie... -
The relationship between Wen and Joseph was really brought to life for me here. I can totally imagine everything you've depicted. From the rock pulling, the river, the pile, our two protagonists here and their actions. Joseph and Wen; you breathe life into them. They're like real people you can bump into, ya know? You've improved a lot on these characters and have expanded them quite awesomely.
And, as always, you always get me to laugh.
As far as your philosophy goes, you raise all good points and I agree with every point you bring out.
The ending, test time lol
I love Joseph and Wen.
I'll be reading the next chapter now :)
9/27/2015 c10 Red-Damascus-Steel
I'm surprised you made Joseph's robes gray because I know you really dislike that color lol
But, it's nice to know their morning routine and little friend is mega adorable :)))
The girl! Foreshadowing? She saw him naked and Joseph is all like... Oh well lol what can ya do? It'll be interesting to see that connect later.
Awesome chapter! Looking forward to reading more!
I'm surprised you made Joseph's robes gray because I know you really dislike that color lol
But, it's nice to know their morning routine and little friend is mega adorable :)))
The girl! Foreshadowing? She saw him naked and Joseph is all like... Oh well lol what can ya do? It'll be interesting to see that connect later.
Awesome chapter! Looking forward to reading more!
9/14/2015 c9 14Virtuella
Ah, highly amusing, especially the end. They have a collapsible teapot now, did I miss that earlier? Love the snark at poor teaching where only the teacher's expected answer is right.
14VirtuellaAh, highly amusing, especially the end. They have a collapsible teapot now, did I miss that earlier? Love the snark at poor teaching where only the teacher's expected answer is right.
9/14/2015 c9 1Red-Damascus-Steel
lolololol I like the end
Also, Avatar Wen lol
Noice! Looking forward to the next chapter!
1Red-Damascus-Steellolololol I like the end
Also, Avatar Wen lol
Noice! Looking forward to the next chapter!
9/9/2015 c8 Red-Damascus-Steel
Lmao, this was the most adorable chapter I've ever read xD Bragging rights haha
Joseph has developed quite nicely through this story. His relationship with Wen definitely has me coming back and wanting to read more.
The dead body in the previous chapter made me ";-;" lol
I'm waiting on what you'll do with that tornado... I'm excited!
I hope to read more from you, Biscuit! :)
Lmao, this was the most adorable chapter I've ever read xD Bragging rights haha
Joseph has developed quite nicely through this story. His relationship with Wen definitely has me coming back and wanting to read more.
The dead body in the previous chapter made me ";-;" lol
I'm waiting on what you'll do with that tornado... I'm excited!
I hope to read more from you, Biscuit! :)
8/21/2015 c8 Guest
Bragging rights, hehehehe! I'm glad to see Joseph and his Sensei are continuing their journey!
Bragging rights, hehehehe! I'm glad to see Joseph and his Sensei are continuing their journey!
7/20/2015 c6 Red-Damascus-Steel
Wooooooooooooooooooo!
Hop along, Joseph! Hop along!
I loiked it, Scotty-O! Keep it up! Can't wait ta see how it goes yo
I'm waiting to see if someone'll die o.
Wooooooooooooooooooo!
Hop along, Joseph! Hop along!
I loiked it, Scotty-O! Keep it up! Can't wait ta see how it goes yo
I'm waiting to see if someone'll die o.
7/17/2015 c1 LonelyGirlLoveStories
I like this story already although I found abit hard to get a grasp of it at first... probably just because I am a bit tired at the moment! Keep on the amazing writing!
I like this story already although I found abit hard to get a grasp of it at first... probably just because I am a bit tired at the moment! Keep on the amazing writing!
7/14/2015 c5 Red-Damascus-Steel
JOSEPH!
Interesting. I wonder what will happen next?
Hopefully Joseph has enough luck to not die, enough chance to survive and, hopefully, it's his fate to pass the test of balance!
Looking forward to the next chapter, Scotty-O!
JOSEPH!
Interesting. I wonder what will happen next?
Hopefully Joseph has enough luck to not die, enough chance to survive and, hopefully, it's his fate to pass the test of balance!
Looking forward to the next chapter, Scotty-O!
7/11/2015 c1 95Lilly-Deactivated
Hi, Lilly Bean here!
First off, I LOVE this idea. Sure, it's a little confusing with some of the details, but that's what makes it so amusing. :)
I"m going to start with a few individual sentences (please forgive me if someone else has already said the same things):
[Deep in the heart of the mysterious, wooded, and highly misunderstood landmass known as Mississippi, tucked between the bayous of Louisiana and the foothills of Alabama, a very old man and a young man wandered aimlessly through the very thick forests of the Mississippi pine belt...]
I'm sorry, this SCREAMS run on sentence to me. Personally, it made it rather confusing to read. This could be fixed by being cut down, or separated into several sentences, like this:
{It was deep in the heart of the mysterious, wooded, and highly misunderstood landmass known as Mississippi. A place tucked between the bayous of Louisiana, and the foothills of Alabama. It was there in the very thick forests of the Mississippi pine belt, that a very old man, and a young man wandered about aimlessly.}
It may make it a tad longer, but it's easier to read. Of course, this is just my opinion, but it's important to keep such things in mind. I noticed a few other places, but that was the main one. Remember, the first sentence can be the deciding factor in if a person keeps reading.
I do think you are quite good at grammar/spelling, the only thing I noticed was where you said,
[Pulling it out, he held it up to the dying light of the sunset no read the label.]
{Pulling it out, he held it up to the dying light of the sunset to read the label.}
Can you catch the error in the first sentence now?
And another thing, I think in one of the first few paragraphs you meant, "bumped," not, "bump."
Other than that, I didn't notice much. That doesn't mean there isn't some I didn't notice, but it just means they aren't glaringly obvious. :) I rather liked this story, great job! Looking forward to reading and reviewing the other chapters!
95Lilly-DeactivatedHi, Lilly Bean here!
First off, I LOVE this idea. Sure, it's a little confusing with some of the details, but that's what makes it so amusing. :)
I"m going to start with a few individual sentences (please forgive me if someone else has already said the same things):
[Deep in the heart of the mysterious, wooded, and highly misunderstood landmass known as Mississippi, tucked between the bayous of Louisiana and the foothills of Alabama, a very old man and a young man wandered aimlessly through the very thick forests of the Mississippi pine belt...]
I'm sorry, this SCREAMS run on sentence to me. Personally, it made it rather confusing to read. This could be fixed by being cut down, or separated into several sentences, like this:
{It was deep in the heart of the mysterious, wooded, and highly misunderstood landmass known as Mississippi. A place tucked between the bayous of Louisiana, and the foothills of Alabama. It was there in the very thick forests of the Mississippi pine belt, that a very old man, and a young man wandered about aimlessly.}
It may make it a tad longer, but it's easier to read. Of course, this is just my opinion, but it's important to keep such things in mind. I noticed a few other places, but that was the main one. Remember, the first sentence can be the deciding factor in if a person keeps reading.
I do think you are quite good at grammar/spelling, the only thing I noticed was where you said,
[Pulling it out, he held it up to the dying light of the sunset no read the label.]
{Pulling it out, he held it up to the dying light of the sunset to read the label.}
Can you catch the error in the first sentence now?
And another thing, I think in one of the first few paragraphs you meant, "bumped," not, "bump."
Other than that, I didn't notice much. That doesn't mean there isn't some I didn't notice, but it just means they aren't glaringly obvious. :) I rather liked this story, great job! Looking forward to reading and reviewing the other chapters!
7/10/2015 c1 123A Fire Rose
Need a comma between "Joseph" and "bump" at the top, which should actually be "bumped."
So this is really interesting! I really like the descriptions and the sensory detail. A little confused as to why there is a traditional sensei in Mississippi, but hey. Gonna add this to a community of stories that asks for more reviews :-D
123A Fire RoseNeed a comma between "Joseph" and "bump" at the top, which should actually be "bumped."
So this is really interesting! I really like the descriptions and the sensory detail. A little confused as to why there is a traditional sensei in Mississippi, but hey. Gonna add this to a community of stories that asks for more reviews :-D
7/9/2015 c1 6DarkWolfWavius
I liked this chapter. I liked the dynamic with Joseph and Wen and it had a lot of humorous moments.
My only issue with this chapter is that there are a few spelling mistakes as well as the lack of quotations during certain parts of the conversation. I wouldn't mind this that much, but in some of the lines for this chapter you use quotation marks for some of the conversations so it's kind of inconsistent.
But I still like this chapter D
6DarkWolfWaviusI liked this chapter. I liked the dynamic with Joseph and Wen and it had a lot of humorous moments.
My only issue with this chapter is that there are a few spelling mistakes as well as the lack of quotations during certain parts of the conversation. I wouldn't mind this that much, but in some of the lines for this chapter you use quotation marks for some of the conversations so it's kind of inconsistent.
But I still like this chapter D
7/8/2015 c5 14Virtuella
Oh, I am so glad to see a new chapter of this delightfully silly story! The dead-pan conversation about the value-for-money tea (from a stainless steel flask...) made me laugh. And the Forest of Balance is suitably bizarre. Young Joseph, decidedly more Brutha than Lobsang, continues to amuse me greatly.
14VirtuellaOh, I am so glad to see a new chapter of this delightfully silly story! The dead-pan conversation about the value-for-money tea (from a stainless steel flask...) made me laugh. And the Forest of Balance is suitably bizarre. Young Joseph, decidedly more Brutha than Lobsang, continues to amuse me greatly.
5/12/2015 c4 1Red-Damascus-Steel
xD Little Friend! Oh god haha, it's the little jokes like these that make me like Ancient Wen.
I love Little Friend! He's a sweet heart!
I liked the intermission, gives more depth to the characters.
I'll be looking forward to more of your life lessons.
1Red-Damascus-SteelxD Little Friend! Oh god haha, it's the little jokes like these that make me like Ancient Wen.
I love Little Friend! He's a sweet heart!
I liked the intermission, gives more depth to the characters.
I'll be looking forward to more of your life lessons.
5/12/2015 c3 Red-Damascus-Steel
I like Joseph, however, Ancient Wen :I
He's kind of a jerk, but I like the story. It's interesting.
I like Joseph, however, Ancient Wen :I
He's kind of a jerk, but I like the story. It's interesting.