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1/13/2017 c1 97rust phoenix
I really like the twist in the last line of the poem. It's a haunting piece, with the mix of gentle, innocent language in the first stanza, and the melancholy final line. Your enjambment is also well done.
5/13/2015 c1 2Bahaghari is GraciellaDee
Why is it called "Tokyo"? Makes me wonder. I thought it was hard to read as a poem because of the sudden breaks. Anyway, the image is very vivid at such a brief narrative - it was scary. Serious!y I jumped at the last line.
5/9/2015 c1 True Talker
Reading this makes me think.

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