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9/6/2015 c4 4omega1012
I want more please :) This group looked awesome cant wait!
9/4/2015 c4 17Aza Marael
xD What a great way to introduce yourself. That kid's cute.
9/3/2015 c4 1HestiaAbnegation11
Awesome! THanks for updating and can't wait for more :D Its okay if some chapters are short.
9/3/2015 c4 6MrRedstone
I mean, the chapter was short, but I liked it. I hope you get inspired to write again and have fun with this story!
8/31/2015 c4 3Searching the Skies
I'm glad you updated, but don't worry about apologizing for it taking some time; I think everyone understands that life can sometimes get in the way!

Short, but all around good introductory chapter. Nice to meet some new guild members! Haha, the one with the purple hat seems pretty interesting, and I can see Aiden being pretty cute! Can't wait to see more from Sargulg and Kia, also!

Thanks for the chapter!
7/21/2015 c3 1HestiaAbnegation11
Please update soon... :)
6/16/2015 c3 4omega1012
update soon :)
6/13/2015 c3 Meshugah
So far, it's pretty good. The chapters are decently long and you are very good at carrying the story and introducing OCs. Good job, and good luck.
6/9/2015 c3 dualitydisorder
i like how you introduce everyone one at a time. there are too many stories i've read where the author tries to get everyone out of the way in one big spiel. it would be a nice touch if they ran into more ocs on the way to their destinations. it gives a sense of personality when the introductions ( and circumstances of said introductions) are unique. I'm intrigued by the setup and the story has a lot of places to go. i patiently wait for your next update!
6/4/2015 c1 Phoenix Silver
Name: Arka Vonslei
Age: 25
Gender: Male
Race: Human mother, elf father.
Hair: Black, reaches his shoulders and normally held back in a high ponytail.
Eye color: Dark brown.
Skin tone: Pale brown.
Body type and weight: 6'0, lean and muscular, about 11 stone in weight.
Any other distinguishing features: Hands have various burn scars and his fingers are scarred. Another scar along his left forearm.
Personality: Arka is not somebody anybody forgets in a hurry. He gives out an air of confidence, is incredibly bold and utterly ruthless. He hates messing about with anything; he thinks very efficiently and likes to get things done. That's not to say he doesn't like altering or adapting plans; he simply doesn't like making things last longer than they ought to, such as torturing a person when they're meant to kill them. He doesn't particularly like seeing people in pain though, so that could explain why he doesn't like torture. He tends to be extremely hostile to those that are not his sister, and doesn't really care about anyone other than her. He does occasionally find Eira's over-attachment to him irritating and likes to have some time around from her. He doesn't like to leave her alone too long though; he's afraid she might accidentally kill someone.
Class: Rogue assassin.
Talents: Throwing knives are his speciality, though he does have some ability at archery.
Flaws: He doesn't like seeing people suffering, so he might be swayed to help someone if they looked pathetic enough.
Pets: No.
Relationship: No.
Killed: Yes.
Affiliation: Evil.

Name: Eira
Age: 25
Gender: Female
Race: Human mother, elf father.
Hair: White blonde, reaches her shoulders and is usually kept in a high ponytail.
Eye color: Bright blue.
Skin tone: Deeply tanned.
Body type and weight: 5'5, slender and athletic, weighing about 8 1/2 stone.
Any other distinguishing features: No.
Personality: First impressions are never what they seem with Eira. If you see a blue eyed angel, she's planning to stab you in the back. If a blonde haired beauty's flirting with you, she wants to poison your drink. Eira is very, very good at getting what she wants. She also has a very childish side to her and hates to sit still. She loves to learn new things, regardless of the subject. She has a hot temper and can be set off by the slightest thing; she's more than happy to cause others pain. She is extremely protective and possessive of Arka and hates to be apart from him for any length of time.
Class: Rogue assassin.
Talents: Poisons are her speciality and she usually carries several on her person, with Arka having the antidotes (if there are any). Carries two long knives, which are usually coated in poison, and is fairly adept at using them in a close fight. She can look innocent enough to get away with a lot of things.
Flaws: Can be irrational, is easily distracted and sidetracked if she sees something else that interests her more than the task at hand (ooh look, shinies...). Her biggest flaw is her temper, which can be set off by the slightest thing and often Arka is the only one capable of calming her down. When he's with her, he often holds her back, normally by touching her arm or chest.
Pets: No.
Relationship: No.
Killed: Yes.
Affiliation: Evil.
6/3/2015 c2 1HestiaAbnegation11
The healer! She's amazing, I wonder how she'll be in the story later on! :)

Hestia
6/2/2015 c3 chimamire.no.kage
sounds interesting, you have me wondering who this mysterious K is, is K the first letter of their name or first letter of a house they were for maybe first letter of the organization they represent so many possibilities, whoever it is they have an extensive spy network
6/2/2015 c3 17Aza Marael
Ooh, new characters! :) Derrin is interesting, especially the way he talks.
And K... Who is this mysterious, but very intriguing character?
Also, plot! Nine secret places... Sounds fun. xD National Treasure time!
6/2/2015 c3 1Acarid
Another great story these are coming out white fast! Have you already thought the story through to the end?
6/2/2015 c3 3Searching the Skies
Woah, you update quickly, I like that I'll be sending in my character in one moment!

Your writing so far is clear and easy to read, which is nice. Also the way you write the characters make it easy to remember who is who, whixh is also a big plus. Can't wait to read more!
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