for He Had to Eat7/1/2015 c1 
8LorrahBear
Whoa! Creepy! There were a few scattered typos, but that's an easy fix. What isn't easy is to create a story like this which will draw you in, while at the same time making you want to turn away. Excellently done.
8LorrahBearWhoa! Creepy! There were a few scattered typos, but that's an easy fix. What isn't easy is to create a story like this which will draw you in, while at the same time making you want to turn away. Excellently done.
6/22/2015 c1 Art7Freak
Well, that was well-written and I liked it, but...creepy. Chills, chills. Not sure I want to fall asleep anymore.
Well, that was well-written and I liked it, but...creepy. Chills, chills. Not sure I want to fall asleep anymore.
6/24/2015 c1 5MysteriousFire
Really interesting. The title and the first sentences made me wonder if this was about a vampire. Then you described her getting old, and I wondered if the narrator might be Death. Then you made me wonder if the narrator didn't want her dead, as I first thought (my morbid thoughts or conclusion based on the title?). Then I wondered if it was the ghost of the woman looking down on her dying body. Darn, you have given me so many stories to write already xD
Her soul tasted like coffee... Didn't see that one coming xD I guess mine will as well.
Wow, interesting conclusion. Very nice story! :D
5MysteriousFireReally interesting. The title and the first sentences made me wonder if this was about a vampire. Then you described her getting old, and I wondered if the narrator might be Death. Then you made me wonder if the narrator didn't want her dead, as I first thought (my morbid thoughts or conclusion based on the title?). Then I wondered if it was the ghost of the woman looking down on her dying body. Darn, you have given me so many stories to write already xD
Her soul tasted like coffee... Didn't see that one coming xD I guess mine will as well.
Wow, interesting conclusion. Very nice story! :D
6/22/2015 c1 Willowgreen
I really like the premise of your story, it's a cool concept. It would be interesting to see it developed further. One note, there are two spelling mistakes: 'The tears feel (fell) onto the blanket' and 'the people you loved where (were) so much more yummy'.
I really like the premise of your story, it's a cool concept. It would be interesting to see it developed further. One note, there are two spelling mistakes: 'The tears feel (fell) onto the blanket' and 'the people you loved where (were) so much more yummy'.