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7/7/2015 c1 3obsolete772
Okay, the only criticism I have is to watch your grammar (that is really important when writing stories) and try spacing your paragraphs better. It can hurt people's eyes to look at a clump of writing for too long. Spacing the blocks of writing helps make your story look better as well as read better.

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