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9/7/2015 c1 63yanz
I love the simplicity of this, written like it's a matter of fact understanding. It makes you pause, evokes a sense of peace for a brief moment in time, the perfect atmosphere for a confession. The poem flows beautifully, and I also love that the line "this is me" follows "this is me without you", dropping the "you" literally.
8/7/2015 c1 8rchll
The stand alone line at the beginning really sets the tone of the whole poem and I enjoyed the repetition at the beginning of the second stanza. Sometimes repetition can sound really choppy. Here you pulled it off wonderfully. I like the word "barren". Good word choice. I felt myself relax, as a reader, when it was time to "breathe" again. I'd change the last line to "nothing" instead of "no more".

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