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8/30/2015 c2 2Aske Nat
Great chapter! Using the process of getting up and going to school as a way of telling about the different characters is rather brilliant. The pacing was good, the writing even better, and I find myself wanting to know more about the whole group; a rare thing, as I tend to have favorites.

Nice job!
8/29/2015 c1 1Fantasyne
This is really good so far! I really like it! I'm interested in how the story's going to go, so I really want another chapter, hahaha
8/29/2015 c1 2Aske Nat
It's always difficult to judge a story by a prologue like this, but you still managed to intrigue me; I'll be keeping an eye out for the first chapter.

I noticed a few typos and misplaced commas, and even a little hiccup with tense, but all in all, it wasn't bad. However, I would advice you to break it down in smaller paragraphs; they are quite large.

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