for A Curious Mask9/11/2015 c2 
4devyntheauthor
Two things: One is that I like that this Wister thing has a base in the real world of sorts. It reminds me of ADD and I think that makes it more relate-able while keeping it magical.
The second is that I would work on your word choice. The story is tight, though I'd say a few more details wouldn't hurt. Don't be afraid of a metaphor. And stronger words would also be a nice change. These aren't huge things, but I think you'll notice that your writing will have more depth to it.
Keep at it!
4devyntheauthorTwo things: One is that I like that this Wister thing has a base in the real world of sorts. It reminds me of ADD and I think that makes it more relate-able while keeping it magical.
The second is that I would work on your word choice. The story is tight, though I'd say a few more details wouldn't hurt. Don't be afraid of a metaphor. And stronger words would also be a nice change. These aren't huge things, but I think you'll notice that your writing will have more depth to it.
Keep at it!
9/11/2015 c1 devyntheauthor
So far this is interesting. I like the idea. I've always had a soft spot for the idea of people trying to hide under a mask. It's a metaphor that gets used a lot, but there is always something interesting that can be said of people an society when we get rid of emotions and just look at it without a filter.
So far this is interesting. I like the idea. I've always had a soft spot for the idea of people trying to hide under a mask. It's a metaphor that gets used a lot, but there is always something interesting that can be said of people an society when we get rid of emotions and just look at it without a filter.