for A Challenge2/25/2016 c4 KitKatismyLife
Wow, awesome! Wonder how Ryan feels!
Wow, awesome! Wonder how Ryan feels!
11/30/2015 c4 
11Myst Marshall
You don't have to censor words because you rated it T. Just so you know. Also, I feel like the story is too fast paced and completely random at times. For example, when Tristan announced that he is dating Julie at the amusement park, there is no indication of jealousy from Ryan. Instead, he continues to eat his cheeseburger like he has no care in the world. Maybe have a hint of jealous, such as his shoulders stiffened a brief second upon the news. Also, I am confused why Julie is so willing to give Tristian a chance. Isn't the story about him chasing after Julie? Shouldn't Julie resist his advances and not accept the request to be his girlfriend?
Anyways, it is your story, not mine. :) Feel free to pm me about this review! Until next time!
11Myst MarshallYou don't have to censor words because you rated it T. Just so you know. Also, I feel like the story is too fast paced and completely random at times. For example, when Tristan announced that he is dating Julie at the amusement park, there is no indication of jealousy from Ryan. Instead, he continues to eat his cheeseburger like he has no care in the world. Maybe have a hint of jealous, such as his shoulders stiffened a brief second upon the news. Also, I am confused why Julie is so willing to give Tristian a chance. Isn't the story about him chasing after Julie? Shouldn't Julie resist his advances and not accept the request to be his girlfriend?
Anyways, it is your story, not mine. :) Feel free to pm me about this review! Until next time!
11/10/2015 c3 Cray Cray
I think it is sort of better now, it should be easy to understand what is going on clearly
I think it is sort of better now, it should be easy to understand what is going on clearly
10/15/2015 c1 Shadowglow's Reign
Hmmm... I like this... I feel really weird right now, but I like it!
Hmmm... I like this... I feel really weird right now, but I like it!
10/12/2015 c1 Cray Cray
I don't like it
I don't like it
10/13/2015 c2 6GleekRusherPotterhead13
I love this story and would love to read more. I also like the different points of view for each chapter :)
6GleekRusherPotterhead13I love this story and would love to read more. I also like the different points of view for each chapter :)