10/31/2015 c1 5Lilith S
This work, I find, is really cool.. It's definitely unique, which is always something I find that readers look forward to in both poetry and literature.

I may not be the best at writing poetry, but I believe that putting commas and/or periods at the end of some lines would help transition and break down this technically run-on sentence.

Just a thought. Don't take it too harshly, of course. :)

I thought that this work was beautiful. Keep on writing!

~lustfuleyes100