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6/21/2016 c1 229punctured.lungs
"gunshots sound / a lot like a key / turning in a lock." such a fantastic line.

i did catch one typo - 'taunt' instead of 'taut.'

the only stanza that feels slightly off is the fifth. i think it's just the comma - if there were no commas, it would feel intentionally run-on. if the stanza were separated by a second comma or by being broken into two sentences, it would feel grammatically correct. as it is, it's caught between the two. the stanza itself fits the poem, it's just slightly awkward to read! that is just my opinion though!

i really love this whole poem; i'm sorry it's taken me so long to read and review. i'm going to go read more of your work now, i really enjoyed this!
11/2/2015 c1 4Heart of Sorrow

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