
1/7/2016 c1
6THEBanana316
Sad, and scathing in your assessment of the boy, but feels really honest as a result. Very nice.

Sad, and scathing in your assessment of the boy, but feels really honest as a result. Very nice.
1/7/2016 c1
8LorrahBear
I adore the ending. This was really fantastic, and made me smile in a not quite forgiving way. Excellent.

I adore the ending. This was really fantastic, and made me smile in a not quite forgiving way. Excellent.
1/6/2016 c1
6Victoria Best
Another lovely poem! That ending was so surprising, especially after the beautiful descriptions of the wings, which was my favourite part of the poem as the imagery was so strong and well-written. If I had not seen the summary and the title I would not have seen it coming. I really smiled at the ending - such a great way to finish the poem. You have created a character we can root for and empathise with - I myself have felt at times the same way as her. Your character is very relatable! Conveying a character is very hard to do in poetry, so great work! Another impressive piece!

Another lovely poem! That ending was so surprising, especially after the beautiful descriptions of the wings, which was my favourite part of the poem as the imagery was so strong and well-written. If I had not seen the summary and the title I would not have seen it coming. I really smiled at the ending - such a great way to finish the poem. You have created a character we can root for and empathise with - I myself have felt at times the same way as her. Your character is very relatable! Conveying a character is very hard to do in poetry, so great work! Another impressive piece!
12/20/2015 c1
104PoetOfSaiMiHunManKal
A beautiful poem. The metaphor of a bird being a symbol of freedom but also a potential way to get revenge was incredible. The line "Thanks, but you know" and the following stanza were my favorite parts. The concept of rejecting the freedom to leave and explore other areas in exchange in favor of the freedom to kill one's enemy is quite familiar to me and was effectively conveyed here.

A beautiful poem. The metaphor of a bird being a symbol of freedom but also a potential way to get revenge was incredible. The line "Thanks, but you know" and the following stanza were my favorite parts. The concept of rejecting the freedom to leave and explore other areas in exchange in favor of the freedom to kill one's enemy is quite familiar to me and was effectively conveyed here.
11/3/2015 c1
6Wonwordful
The brevity of this poem drove it home. I love the use of the bird, especially the change of tone after "Thanks." I really like this poem. Thanks for writing.

The brevity of this poem drove it home. I love the use of the bird, especially the change of tone after "Thanks." I really like this poem. Thanks for writing.
11/2/2015 c1
19pastryninja
Nice use of the bird (and its talons and wings) as imagery and metaphor. I also like the contrast between the wings and talons, and can empathize with the speaker's desire for revenge over healing. Well done!

Nice use of the bird (and its talons and wings) as imagery and metaphor. I also like the contrast between the wings and talons, and can empathize with the speaker's desire for revenge over healing. Well done!
11/2/2015 c1
4Heart of Sorrow
I loved the last part! I can definitely relate to it! Your words are so true and heart braking.

I loved the last part! I can definitely relate to it! Your words are so true and heart braking.