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2/11/2019 c2 169MallowsWins
I like the tone of familiarity in this haiku, but the tone is elusive. This mostly works in the poems favour, it's very mysterious.
2/11/2019 c1 MallowsWins
I really like the link between the inherent bitterness of green tea and friendship.
11/5/2018 c13 25Jaya Avendel
Such a lovely description of what wrong actions can do.
9/7/2017 c11 17Bob Story Builder
Love all your haikus! This series with a running theme is fantastic. I thought the bitterness seeps through as a thing of pain and regret. I've been the person who was taking and not giving, and I've been the person giving and not receiving. Both sides are painful. The poem in chapter nine is my favorite because it is layered and can be interpreted in different ways. One way I interpreted it is being emotionally disconnected because if you are disconnected, you are not fully partaking in life. Love your poetry.
9/6/2017 c11 just-slightly-deranged
well written - i felt exactly what you were trying to say, and not just because i've been in this situation before. nicely done :)
4/13/2017 c10 8Wildcat227
i love them all! oh my god do i love them all.
4/13/2017 c3 Wildcat227
LOL
4/13/2017 c2 Wildcat227
oh my god
5/12/2016 c5 8LorrahBear
Woo, harsh! I don't necessarily agree, but I love the snark, and well-selected diction.
5/12/2016 c4 LorrahBear
Makes me think of a twin.
2/10/2016 c5 97rust phoenix
This is an interesting and thought provoking poem. It's difficult to balance relationships with being true to oneself.
2/1/2016 c4 17Bob Story Builder
Sounds like co-dependence, which is not what you were intending. Enjoyed the simplicity of this poem.
1/29/2016 c3 Bob Story Builder
I read the topic of honesty throughout these three poems. The first one had green tea being bitter and made me think of when someone is telling you something you don't want to hear but is good for you. The second one, honesty through understanding and solidarity. Finally the third one has a humorous teasing and gentleness like someone said something that you knew already about yourself but didn't want to admit to. Good series so far and hope you continue it :)
1/7/2016 c3 8LorrahBear
First, smirk is one of my favorite words, so clearly I approve.

The second line doesn't seem to flow as well for me. Perhaps something like "[It] really [pisses] me off." Of course, this is nothing more than person preference and suggestion.

Love the last line. Danger to come!
1/7/2016 c2 LorrahBear
This is delightful because the one showing empathy could be either the subject or the narrator.
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