for A Beautiful Christmas Night1/8/2016 c1 
8LorrahBear
A few small corrections: [someone] instead of "some one who loves..." As well as "To come down to us[,] / there would be no..." A comma instead of a period here is probably more correct.
Other than that, this flowed well and was well written. Well done.
8LorrahBearA few small corrections: [someone] instead of "some one who loves..." As well as "To come down to us[,] / there would be no..." A comma instead of a period here is probably more correct.
Other than that, this flowed well and was well written. Well done.