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1/4/2016 c1 8LorrahBear
Wow, this is a phenominal start! You've painted an almost poetic picture, and I loved reading this. I look forward to more!
1/2/2016 c1 JonathanKonopka
Hello there, thank-you for noting my story, and now I am finally to return the interest. I would have done this sooner, but I was quite busy in a few other websites.

This short piece has an interesting concept, and I like the opening sentence. You poetically describe the features of falsehood, and how your serpentine self becomes twisted in its future, a nice pair of analogies. How you lie to seem brave, due to weakness, was a strong line. Of course, by “you” I mean the narrator. The pieces ends with an apology, lamenting the wrongs the narrator has done. Well, overall a nicely-written piece. I don't have much to say, but thank-you for making this, and see you next time, maybe.

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