
1/3/2016 c1
8LorrahBear
First, a few tiny things I noticed:
"...Logistics and [Air flight] [Navigation] capable..."
"...or a wrong [number] from someone's..."
"only a small [isle] between..."
All that being said, I *love* that he fixes the door to a space ship with duct tape. You've once again managed to create a fantastic start to a story, and I'm excited to see where you go with this plot. Great start!

First, a few tiny things I noticed:
"...Logistics and [Air flight] [Navigation] capable..."
"...or a wrong [number] from someone's..."
"only a small [isle] between..."
All that being said, I *love* that he fixes the door to a space ship with duct tape. You've once again managed to create a fantastic start to a story, and I'm excited to see where you go with this plot. Great start!