for Prince Charming (Labyrinth February 2015)7/31/2022 c1 knockmeoffmyfeet
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3/12/2016 c1 
31TanteLiz
Love the premise - excellent use of the prompt! The characters are consistent and believable (although the Prince kinda IS an asshole), and you come up with some of the best descriptors I have EVER read!
This really did make me wax nostalgic for my college days. Gotta admit, though, I was waiting for a fairy godmother to show up...
31TanteLizLove the premise - excellent use of the prompt! The characters are consistent and believable (although the Prince kinda IS an asshole), and you come up with some of the best descriptors I have EVER read!
This really did make me wax nostalgic for my college days. Gotta admit, though, I was waiting for a fairy godmother to show up...
3/6/2016 c1 75AlysonSerenaStone
Oh, Cinderella! I love Cinderella retellings! Growing up, this was always my favourite fairy tale. In fact, I almost did this Cinderella for my entry, but decided against it. I really did like all of the appearances by other famous princesses. It really made for a good mix!
I love how you made it modern. I love the idea of the MET ball and speed dating. It really does show that a fairy tale ending is possible in our crazy modern day lives. I just love how over the top everything was.
Beautiful writing!
Great work and best of luck!
75AlysonSerenaStoneOh, Cinderella! I love Cinderella retellings! Growing up, this was always my favourite fairy tale. In fact, I almost did this Cinderella for my entry, but decided against it. I really did like all of the appearances by other famous princesses. It really made for a good mix!
I love how you made it modern. I love the idea of the MET ball and speed dating. It really does show that a fairy tale ending is possible in our crazy modern day lives. I just love how over the top everything was.
Beautiful writing!
Great work and best of luck!
3/5/2016 c1 82Solemn Coyote
Twigged in the first three lines to the fact that the narrator was male. Not sure what tipped me off.
"Middle-aged Sid Vicious wearing Barbie's shoes" is a brilliant line
Narrator's characterization is strong. Complex and fey.
Saying that Prince looks like David Bowie might be a hair too much. Reading that was a bit like being hit with a pink baseball bat; one that is wearing a feather boa and pearls.
"One look at Snow White and I knew she was poison." If you are not going to steal this line, transplant it, and use it to write hardboiled fairytale detective fiction with, THEN I AM VERY DISAPPOINT.
This story emits glitter and disco from its very pores. I am amazed this was not set several decades ago to catch that zeitgeist.
"The stage lights made it look like an angel had come down to earth and assumed the form of Aretha Franklin". WHERE DO YOU COME UP WITH THESE? How long have you had this particular story bottled up for?!
Weird line to end on, since there's just enough plausible supernatural skimming the edges of the story that it could be true. Was that the intent? If so, this might need to be extended, because it doesn't feel like the story has come to a conclusion. And if not, maybe prune some of the other fairytales during the speed dating segment? They're great and well-written, but they muddy the waters if there is *not* supposed to be a bunch of ancient narratives trying to assert themselves on New York nightlife.
Either way, this is excellently written. Not something I'd normally seek out, since it is several coats of sequins past my usual upper limit for catty and flamboyant, but I will be pointing at least one other reader your way.
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82Solemn CoyoteTwigged in the first three lines to the fact that the narrator was male. Not sure what tipped me off.
"Middle-aged Sid Vicious wearing Barbie's shoes" is a brilliant line
Narrator's characterization is strong. Complex and fey.
Saying that Prince looks like David Bowie might be a hair too much. Reading that was a bit like being hit with a pink baseball bat; one that is wearing a feather boa and pearls.
"One look at Snow White and I knew she was poison." If you are not going to steal this line, transplant it, and use it to write hardboiled fairytale detective fiction with, THEN I AM VERY DISAPPOINT.
This story emits glitter and disco from its very pores. I am amazed this was not set several decades ago to catch that zeitgeist.
"The stage lights made it look like an angel had come down to earth and assumed the form of Aretha Franklin". WHERE DO YOU COME UP WITH THESE? How long have you had this particular story bottled up for?!
Weird line to end on, since there's just enough plausible supernatural skimming the edges of the story that it could be true. Was that the intent? If so, this might need to be extended, because it doesn't feel like the story has come to a conclusion. And if not, maybe prune some of the other fairytales during the speed dating segment? They're great and well-written, but they muddy the waters if there is *not* supposed to be a bunch of ancient narratives trying to assert themselves on New York nightlife.
Either way, this is excellently written. Not something I'd normally seek out, since it is several coats of sequins past my usual upper limit for catty and flamboyant, but I will be pointing at least one other reader your way.
-SC