
4/16/2016 c1
8LorrahBear
An interesting start. I like how you introduced us to the facts of his (your) life without sitting us down to say exactly what was going on. Only one typo that I caught:
"'How's it going, Sergeant?' [h]e asked nonchalantly."
I hope you continue.

An interesting start. I like how you introduced us to the facts of his (your) life without sitting us down to say exactly what was going on. Only one typo that I caught:
"'How's it going, Sergeant?' [h]e asked nonchalantly."
I hope you continue.