8/11/2016 c1 28CMfan5000
You're right it's grim. ;) Also kind of dark, in a bittersweet way. You foreshadow nicely, I kind of knew the ending early on.
I like the way you avoided using the typical words of repentance. (I'm sorry, etc) It emphasizes and reinforces the effort to do more/improve on the usual that the protagonist is making.
I'm not sure I can claim to have enjoyed this, but it is well written and I appreciate that.
You're right it's grim. ;) Also kind of dark, in a bittersweet way. You foreshadow nicely, I kind of knew the ending early on.
I like the way you avoided using the typical words of repentance. (I'm sorry, etc) It emphasizes and reinforces the effort to do more/improve on the usual that the protagonist is making.
I'm not sure I can claim to have enjoyed this, but it is well written and I appreciate that.
4/17/2016 c1 5MysteriousFire
"I am hated and seen as beyond redemption by the one I love the most." wow, I love that quote!
It's a really interesting prompt. I'm tempted to try it out myself XD
I really wonder what the guy has done!
Very powerful story. I like your writing style a lot. You did a great job! :D
"I am hated and seen as beyond redemption by the one I love the most." wow, I love that quote!
It's a really interesting prompt. I'm tempted to try it out myself XD
I really wonder what the guy has done!
Very powerful story. I like your writing style a lot. You did a great job! :D